Some people claim that a nation's government should preserve its wilderness areas in their natural state. Others argue that these areas should be developed for potential economic gain.Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns wi

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Some people claim that a nation's government should preserve its wilderness areas in their natural state. Others argue that these areas should be developed for potential economic gain.

Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.

Planet Earth is becoming smaller every year. As the human population grows exponentially in size and the planet’s resources are already depleted, it is estimated that, by 2050, all of the planet’s surface will be covered with either large cities or industrial facilities. As the need for geographical space and resources is becoming increasingly critical, some people argue that we should stop protecting wilderness areas and should utilize them for economic growth. Assuredly, these areas contain a lot of natural resources and could be exploited for financial purposes. However, if wilderness areas are not preserved, there is an appreciable risk for serious implications, such as the extinction of inhabitant species and the unbalancing of the local ecosystems. Thus, we should preserve wilderness areas in their natural state, and refrain from altering them for financial profit.

What many people are forgetting when proposing plans to develop wilderness areas is that these areas are the natural habitats of many species. Some plants or animals can only survive in certain areas of the world, which means one could not simply move them somewhere else in order to develop their home environment. There are also some species that cannot survive if they are brought in contact with other species, for different reasons, such as an underdeveloped immune system. If we do not protect such areas, we risk putting such species in danger of extinction. For example, the “kri-kri” goat is a rare species of goat that can only be found on the island of Crete, in Greece. Dairy products from its milk are regarded as especially nutritious, and the local area attracts thousands of visitors every summer, that come to observe its natural environment. The government of Crete currently has the “kri-kri” species under protection by preserving its natural habitat and posing strict limitation on entrance to the area. If this area was not properly protected, it is likely that the species would not be able to survive, as has happened with other Eastern Mediterranean regions “kri-kri” goats used to be found. Therefore, it is necessary to preserve wilderness areas in their original state, in order to protect the animals and plants that inhabit them.

One should also have in mind that wilderness areas are often necessary for providing balance to the ecosystem of a larger area. They can provide neighboring cities with considerable amounts of oxygen, or distribute special minerals and nutritional substances to nearby areas, facilitating farming. The existence of these wilderness areas proves critical for the survival of those living around them. If we were to subject these areas to major alterations, we would probably rid ourselves of their many benefits. An example that is often brought into discussions of the topic is the case of Hong Kong. The capital city of Hong Kong is well known for its low air quality, to the point that its citizens purchase bottled oxygen in order to ensure proper breathing. Among the factors that have contributed to this situation is the absence of any wilderness areas around the city. The minimal vegetation inside the city is not enough to cover the population’s needs for oxygen. Hong Kong is the example of a government that did not protect its wilderness areas in favor of economic gain, but in this way disturbed the balance of the local ecosystem.

Despite some strong reasons behind the preservation of wilderness areas, there are some who argue that the exploitation of these areas could create opportunities for financial gain. According to them, one could utilize their natural resources for farming or forestry products, or even use their geographical space to build factories. However, there are other ways that these areas already contribute to economic growth, without being subjected to substantial alterations. For example, many wilderness areas are utilized as natural parks and attract visitors who want to see rare species in their natural habitats. Furthermore, preserved wilderness areas are crucial to Biology or Chemistry researchers who often need to observe or replicate an environment without accounting for human-introduced factors. Only in this way are advancements in fields, such as Medicine, possible, and the preservation of these areas indirectly contributes to such developments.

All in all, there are different views on whether wilderness areas should be preserved in their natural state. While many propose that wilderness areas should be developed for financial profit, it is also possible to create value from such without altering them. Conversely, it is necessary that we preserve these areas, if we are to protect the plants and animals that inhabit them and the balance of the larger ecosystem they are part of.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 183, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, thus, well, while, as to, for example, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 42.0 19.5258426966 215% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.3162921348 203% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 70.0 33.0505617978 212% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 95.0 58.6224719101 162% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4083.0 2235.4752809 183% => OK
No of words: 766.0 442.535393258 173% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33028720627 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.26086542369 4.55969084622 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98203330227 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 339.0 215.323595506 157% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.442558746736 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1299.6 704.065955056 185% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.2370786517 163% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8376180597 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.727272727 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2121212121 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.21951772744 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.403828442603 0.243740707755 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112107083144 0.0831039109588 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0723571181872 0.0758088955206 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.253200178846 0.150359130593 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0240763965764 0.0667264976115 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 176.0 100.480337079 175% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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