Teachers' salaries should be based on their students' academic performance.
Throughout the history, one of the indices of development and civilization in each society is the literacy rate of its citizens. In consequence, the authorities are endeavoring to make new educational policies in order to improve the educational system. A controversial question regarding this issue is whether the teachers' salaries should be according to their students' performance or not. Some people are inclined towards the opinion that because having a penchant for applying effective methods, teachers should be paid based on students' performance. But I, despite the general consensus, believe that it is not illegal to determine teachers' income according to their students’ performance due to some reasons. In what follows, I will aptly explain my viewpoints.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that if the societies want to behave fairly about teachers, teachers' salaries should be relative to their hours which they work instead of their performance. As a matter of fact, determining the salaries of teachers based on students performance is not fairly because many schools only register top and intelligent students. Accordingly, it is obvious that the performance of students from these types of schools is generally higher than other schools which do not have any limitation for registering the students. In addition, there aren't any valid indices for determining the students' performance. To illustrate, suppose the situation that schools pay teachers' according to students' performance. The first question should be responded is how we can calculate the students' performance? If schools determine the marks of the students as one option. It is possible that this policy leads teachers to make a mistake. In conjunction with this idea, teachers who are not honest can easily report the grads of his students higher than they are. As a result, determining the teachers' salaries based on their students' is not the valid way.
Another equally significant point to be mentioned is that hardly can anyone deny the fact that teachers are not responsible for students. In other words, teaching is the teachers' duties and studying is the students' duties. In each class, there are some students who are not interested in lessons or learning. Hence, although teachers use various methods for teaching, their methods will not affect their ambitions and they don't pay heed to what teachers teach, since considering them as some ironic illusions. It is crystal-clear that although there is great correlation between how teachers teach and how much students learn if teachers instruct well, it is not their duties whether students have a high performance or not.
In a nutshell, contemplating all the above-mentioned reasons, one soon realizes that having the unfair comparison and not being responsible for students, both, are the main reasons why teachers' salaries should not be based on students' performance. Thereupon, I strongly suggest that authorities put more emphasis on using the valid ways for determining the teachers' income.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...sing the valid ways for determining the teachers income.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, hence, if, regarding, so, well, in addition, as a matter of fact, as a result, in my view, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.5258426966 164% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2584.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 479.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39457202505 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97556672315 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471816283925 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 778.5 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5603802572 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.347826087 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8260869565 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.65217391304 5.21951772744 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.437043225522 0.243740707755 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126244389137 0.0831039109588 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0945890257586 0.0758088955206 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.274771845375 0.150359130593 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0619403797363 0.0667264976115 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 100.480337079 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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