Technology, while apparently aimed to simplify our lives, only makes our lives more complicated.
Technology has no doubt had an immutable impact on our lives. The goal of technology is clearly to enable - to make things that were previously impossible or difficult , possible or relatively easier. One may argue that technology has undoubtly done so! However this claim is worth closer examining.
Technology enchance our ability and productivity, allowing us to do far more now, in the same time than we could before. This is particularly pertinent in our professional lives. We are no longer hamstrung by several factors that would prevously be impossible to overcome - long distances, extreme weather and non-availability of information. These constraints are now trivial. However this new found freedom has now put us in a relentless pursuit of perfection and productivity - attend just one more meeting, finish up just one more piece of code today - that we ignore the parts of life that are fundamental to us. Dinner with the family, a soccer game with friends have little claim to our time in this fast paced world.
Technology has certainly had an impact on relationships, while it is now possible to talk to our dear ones despite being a thousand miles away, it is equally possible to eschew their company for a set of virtual friends on the internet that are a thousand miles away. "Blue ticks" - introduced as a recent update on whatsapp, the worlds most popular internet messaging platform has only made things more complex. This update makes it possible to see the exact time a message sent to a contact was "read". This completely ignores the possibility that despite viewing a recieved message, it may not be read! It also puts pressure on the recepient of the message - to respond immediately, as the sender may take umbrage to the fact the his message was read but not responded to.
This may further complicate things in a professional setup, where someone is unable to immediately respond to his boss' message Examining the above cases makes it clear that the question of whether technology makes our lives simpler needs itself a complex one. On the surafce it certainly seems so. However one must account for the implications of the new technologies, as this may bring to the fore a whole host of new questions and complexities.
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...ion. These constraints are now trivial. However this new found freedom has now put us i...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'while', 'no doubt']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.214117647059 0.240241500013 89% => OK
Verbs: 0.152941176471 0.157235817809 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0988235294118 0.0880659088768 112% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0894117647059 0.0497285424764 180% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0541176470588 0.0444667217837 122% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0917647058824 0.12292977631 75% => OK
Participles: 0.0282352941176 0.0406280797675 69% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.9096696179 2.79330140395 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.04 0.030933414821 129% => OK
Particles: 0.00235294117647 0.0016655270985 141% => OK
Determiners: 0.101176470588 0.0997080785238 101% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0188235294118 0.0249443105267 75% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0117647058824 0.0148568991511 79% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2289.0 2732.02544248 84% => OK
No of words: 380.0 452.878318584 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.02368421053 6.0361032391 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.58838876751 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.355263157895 0.366273622748 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.286842105263 0.280924506359 102% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.184210526316 0.200843997647 92% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.134210526316 0.132149295362 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9096696179 2.79330140395 104% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 219.290929204 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568421052632 0.48968727796 116% => OK
Word variations: 65.3894203447 55.4138127331 118% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6194690265 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.1111111111 23.380412469 90% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.0541824966 59.4972553346 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.166666667 141.124799967 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1111111111 23.380412469 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.444444444444 0.674092028746 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.21349557522 249% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 49.7953216374 51.4728631049 97% => OK
Elegance: 1.12698412698 1.64882698954 68% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199496168226 0.391690518653 51% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0928313023922 0.123202303941 75% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0835481686558 0.077325440228 108% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.475879962626 0.547984918172 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.158611947131 0.149214159877 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0767753523968 0.161403998019 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0719531270064 0.0892212321368 81% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.308742432141 0.385218514788 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.114503778428 0.0692045440612 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143490084356 0.275328986314 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0205095966415 0.0653680567796 31% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.4325221239 86% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.30420353982 113% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88274336283 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 7.22455752212 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.66592920354 109% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 13.5995575221 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader.
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better to have 5 paragraphs: Try this pattern:
paragraph 1: introduction. Suppose we support side A.
paragraph 2: reason 1 + why reason 1 + example of reason 1 + a small conclusion (like advantages of reason 1 or comparisons if not reason 1).
paragraph 3: reason 2 + why reason 2 + example of reason 2 + a small conclusion (like advantages of reason 2 or comparisons if not reason 2).
paragraph 4: Admittedly, there are some advantages of side B. First, ... Second, .... However, there is no causation/relation.... I still support side A. first,....second...
paragraph 5: conclusion -- reinforce the thesis.
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Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.