To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
A country or state is often known by its major cities. These cities are more advanced and more developed. They give a better image of a country especially in the international stage. I agree that such information can be educative, but only to an extent. A society is more than just what we learn from its major cities, and there are other rustic or pastoral parts of the society which are definitely more informative.
Let us consider Nigeria. Lagos is the busiest city in the country, situated in the western region of the country. Lagos is the most populous city, and has the most advanced infrastructure and facilities. Most of the top companies in Lagos are headquartered in Lagos. And there are many job opportunities for youth in Lagos. Because of Lagos, Nigeria can compete confidently in international trade, with nearby African countries or countries from other continents. But Nigeria is more than just Lagos. Nigeria is a country with many ethnic groups, speaking many languages. In the eastern part of the country, you hear more of the Igbo language, while Hausa is more commonly spoken in northern Nigeria. The different tribes in Nigeria speak different languages and have dissimilar traditions. In addition, the way marriage ceremonies are conducted differ, and each tribe has its own history. All these, and more, add up to what is known as Nigeria. To understand the history of Nigeria, and its most important characteristics, it is vital to study other parts of Nigeria, and not just focus on Lagos alone.
Similarly, France is more than what its capital city, Paris, tell us. Paris is the unofficial fashion capital of the world. Many people travel to Paris to buy clothes and bags. Some other even settle there, and run their businesses. Thus in Paris you have people from many parts of the world, and the percentage of the real citizens of Paris drops. Other parts of France, especially the countryside, are probably into milk and cheese production than Paris. These parts are mainly occupied by French. Studying them would definitely give someone more understanding of France as a country.
I agree that for a country, the major cities help give a better image, especially in the international stage. But to get a full understanding of the important characteristics of the entire country, including the history and evolution, it is vital to study the other parts and not just a few major cities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 234, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...settle there, and run their businesses. Thus in Paris you have people from many part...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, similarly, so, thus, while, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2020.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 407.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96314496314 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80540407125 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 215.323595506 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486486486486 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 656.1 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 12.0 1.77640449438 676% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 23.0359550562 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.6427159174 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.1428571429 118.986275619 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5357142857 23.4991977007 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.71428571429 5.21951772744 33% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 4.83258426966 331% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143969472398 0.243740707755 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0347594119733 0.0831039109588 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0389038702925 0.0758088955206 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0965315432648 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0338222282152 0.0667264976115 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 14.1392134831 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 48.8420337079 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 12.1743820225 72% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 100.480337079 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.2143820225 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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