Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study.
The author states that universities need to force all the students to take various classes even though they are not directly related to students’ majors. This issue is a controversial one because the claim may hold depends on the situations. For undergraduate students, it would be helpful to take a variety of classes for general education. For graduated students, on the other hand, it may be a waste of time and resources.
For undergraduate students, it may be beneficial for taking courses not directly relating to ones’ majors. Consider an adult who wants to change one’s own career from philosophy to engineering. Without a basic foundation of math or science, the person will face inevitably great difficulties. Besides, many inventions weren’t able to accomplish without a diverse background in arts and sciences. For example, Steve Jobs, the founder of Apple and the inventor of the iPhone, went to Reed College and majored in Philosophy. Although he didn’t finish college, he took several courses not related to his major such as Visual Design, which enable him to come up with brilliant ideas contributed to his inventions including the iPhone.
For graduate students, however, such requirement usually does more harm than good. Many graduate students have already lived in professional worlds for years. Even though they haven’t been exposed to the practical environment, students certainly have completed undergraduate education. What the graduate students want to achieve at the school now is a profound and focused research about the specific major. Additionally, the education of the graduate level is sometimes funded by one’s employer. For example, someone who works for the engineering firm manufacturing semiconductor goes to graduate school to study semiconductors with the financial support of the firm. It would not appropriate if the student takes a substantial amount of time to take literature courses.
In conclusion, diversified education seems beneficial; however, it is not universal. Undergraduate students need multifaceted foundations in a variety of fields. Nevertheless, graduate students require narrower approaches in their studies.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 33.0505617978 45% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1876.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 333.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.63363363363 5.05705443957 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21632416549 2.79657885939 115% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 215.323595506 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.612612612613 0.4932671777 124% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.9131422247 60.3974514979 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.8 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.65 23.4991977007 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.21951772744 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181998340484 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0591320978488 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0701264767353 0.0758088955206 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128879551265 0.150359130593 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569438924456 0.0667264976115 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 38.31 48.8420337079 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.08 12.1639044944 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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