As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and mysterious.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take

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As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and mysterious.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

Human history is a history about exploring the unknown and accumulating knowledge. Ironically, it seems that the more we learn about, the more incomprehensible the world gets to be. As is argued in the statement, our world even becomes more “complex and mysterious” every time when we figure out something new. However, I have to argue that this statement is quite biased and unreasonable, and my reasons are as following.

First of all, the author mentioned comprehensibility and complexity regarding the world. However, I have to point out that complexity does not necessarily lead to incomprehensibility. There are so many examples in history which deomonstrate that human beings have the capacity of comprehending intricate concepts. For instance, before inventing the very first airplane, it was just so difficult and challenging for humans to figure out the secrets of flying. Though some other species like birds are born with the ability to fly, it seemed just impossible for us as humans. Nevertheless, with hardwork and dedication from generations after generations, airplane was invented and it even becomes a common way of transportation nowadays. Thus, I argue that incomprehensibility under complexity is just temporary, with time and efforts, anything will be comprehensible.

In addition to that, the author also argued that the more knowledge we learn, the more complex the world will be. However, this is definitely a subjective feeling rather than an objective fact. The world might be changing rapidly, but the basic rules that dominate the world always stay the same. For example, the rule that defines how asteroids circles a star is always the same as how it was since the very first star-gazer. We may have proposed thousands of theories to explain that and finally concurred at a specific one, but the true rule is always there, and never change a bit no matter what. As demostrated above, the rules that run the world is always there, and they have not and will not change according to how we perceive the world.

Last but not least, I also have to mention that the author’s claim that the world will become more mysterious when we acquire more knowledge is also biased. I have to admit that it is quite true that new mysteries will pop up when we understand something new, but it is also undeniable that we have comprehended some problems which are mysterious to us before. In the proccess of learning about the world, it is always the case that old mysteries will become understandable and new mysteries will show up and drive us to try to understand them. This is a self-perpetuation proccess and it is oversimplified and biased to claim that the world is always becoming more mysterious.

To put it together, this statement misunderstood the relationship between incomprehensibility and complexity, decribed a subjective feeling which was not true, and oversimplifies the self-perpetuating proccess of how we perceive the world.

Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 303, Rule ID: CONFUSION_OF_OUR_OUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'our'?
Suggestion: our
...terious' every time when we figure out something new. However, I have to argue...

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, regarding, so, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.3162921348 212% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 53.0 33.0505617978 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2503.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 485.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16082474227 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.27835051546 2.79657885939 117% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474226804124 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 789.3 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6622100883 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.772727273 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0454545455 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.21951772744 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185893092338 0.243740707755 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.060147598437 0.0831039109588 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.054444590626 0.0758088955206 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110011527773 0.150359130593 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419692313804 0.0667264976115 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?


Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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