As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and mysterious.
it is very well said that knowledge is not limited to what we learn once is enough. a person always has something to learn and explore and should never stop acquiring knowledge and there is always been a question when to stop or when is it time to stop.the prompt recommends that as we acquire more knowledge rather than becoming comprehensible it becomes more complex to us.I believe that knowledge when acquired on any subject can not be extra and it can definitely not become complex if acquired in right way i can support this two reasons.
to begin with , todays world is full of new emerging ideas, technologies and to stay in touch and updated we all need to learn these new inventions and changes to work and keep up with the new generation and for doing so we need to stuff or heads with all the new information which can sound stressful but if done in right way it would not complex the stuff rather make it easier to understand and cope with because if we do not learn we may lack behind and face problems. To illustrate this we can look at a of a professor or a teacher the learning process for them is never ending they keep on updating themselves according to their students and technologies that are being invented to make learning a better process and the teachers are doing their best to acquire the knowledge of the new technologies to help the process and it is not being mysterious or complex in any way to all of them as they still continuing with the profession as if they felt it was complex and mysterious would have given up their jobs hence, i think acquiring knowledge in a large quantity does not necessarily make it complex or incomprehensible but if taken in right way it would only help them grow.
Further more, even if we agree that when we burden ourself with a lot of knowledge we may in the end not find it comprehensible and it may seem extremely arduous job to do but, with the wold changing and competition increasing it is become a necessity for people to keep learning with time and keep themselves updated to excel in their field of work and that cannot be denied or taken a step back wont help with this issue. For instance if we look at the law students who studied back in 1900's have knowledge of what they studied but know due to a lot of changes in the curriculum and laws itself they dont have any option then to learn what all new has been put on nor they wont be able to continue with their profession and this does not mean that acquiring more knowledge would make it complex for them definitely it would be difficult but if dine in a right way it would not only help them career wise but will also make them aware of current affairs. therefore, it is really necessary to keep acquiring knowledge and rather than taking it to be complex plan it in a right way it wold make it easy and comprehensible.
In conclusion, as much as u acquire knowledge that much it is easier for a person to survive the changing time and world. admitiadlly it can be a tiring and stressful process to keep up with lot of iinformation but if proper steps are taken to understand the process it would be helpful and comprehensible rather than complex and mysterious.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, look, may, really, so, still, then, therefore, well, for instance, i think, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 41.0 14.8657303371 276% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 33.0505617978 218% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2626.0 2235.4752809 117% => OK
No of words: 589.0 442.535393258 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.4584040747 5.05705443957 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92639038232 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59489034517 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.383701188455 0.4932671777 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 804.6 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.2370786517 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 65.0 23.0359550562 282% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 202.990664506 60.3974514979 336% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 291.777777778 118.986275619 245% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 65.4444444444 23.4991977007 278% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 14.0 5.21951772744 268% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 7.80617977528 231% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214940997067 0.243740707755 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0954463210631 0.0831039109588 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0650196034924 0.0758088955206 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143512507692 0.150359130593 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0709350385855 0.0667264976115 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 32.3 14.1392134831 228% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 22.42 48.8420337079 46% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 26.3 12.1743820225 216% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 9.48 12.1639044944 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 11.8971910112 147% => OK
gunning_fog: 28.0 11.2143820225 250% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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