We learn our most valuable lessons in life from struggling with our limitations rather than from enjoying our successes.
It is true that most of the people learn valuable life lessons while struggling to reach pinnacle of the success they are after.Success is not the same thing for everyone.For a sportsman it can be winning a trophy, for business person making money, for an engineer it can be building successful product and for child it can be as simple as passing a grade and moving to next one. All the people go through different struggles during their journey towards success and learn a lot of things which will make their success well deserved and help them enjoy their success for a longer time.
for example, Sportsman has to put in huge efforts during his training, learn right technique, face lot of failures and learn from them. These learning will bring the best out of him. This is the phase where he acquires appropriate skills to be a champion.It is same with businessman or engineer as well. Every individual acquires required skill sets when they are struggling to reach their goals.
Furthermore,It is well-known that reaching the heights we want is easier compared to staying there for a longer period. Experience obtained from the hardship we go through while chasing success definitely aids us not only to stay there but to look beyond and achieve more things which were not perceived earlier. For example Elon Musk, founder of SpaceX had vision to cut cost of space travel by reusing different parts of the launch vehicle, which was never achieved before. During the process all the initial launch attemts were failure and spacex reached verge of bankruptcy.but, the last attempt was a success. This laid foundation for low cost space journeys for future generations. Elon Musk and spacex learnt from their mistakes when they were struggling for finances and finally achieved their first milestone.The lessons they learned will help them to continue their efforts to fully achieve their dreams.
Lastly, It is completely unfair to say there will be no learning once success is attained.Once a person reaches there he will be exposed to newer challenges.For sportsman it could be to how to stay a champion,for business person how scale up,for engineer how to market his product and for a child how to pass next grade. The learning from the first phase will help to accelerate to reach next milestones soon.so, we learn lot of things during journey to success than enjoying from success.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, if, lastly, look, so, well, while, as to, for example, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1999.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 403.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96029776675 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61972227298 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518610421836 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.4410330476 60.3974514979 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.785714286 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7857142857 23.4991977007 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07142857143 5.21951772744 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1235279636 0.243740707755 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0496613832569 0.0831039109588 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513908371367 0.0758088955206 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.086070210264 0.150359130593 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0135945327335 0.0667264976115 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 48.8420337079 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 12.1743820225 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.08 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 100.480337079 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 26.5 11.8971910112 223% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.