We learn our most valuable lessons in life from struggling with our limitations rather than from enjoying our successes.
In general life is combination of both success and failure. As we go forward in life there will be tribulations which will beset us. In spite of all this we move on with our life overcoming all the difficulties. Here the claim suggests that we learn our most valuable lessons in life from struggling with our limitations rather than enjoying our successes. I accept this claim.
Let us consider an example about a phone company. when they release a model of a mobile and it becomes a big success and they had got more number of sales than expected. At this stage if the company only looks at the triumph and doesn't look at the smaller problems which there in their released mobile they cannot make a better version of it. Although it is important to celebrate their success, assessing the cons and taking feedback is significant to become better.
Another example is about the time when British conquered India and had colonised them for over a century. All the people were treated as vassals and were divested of their freedom. During those times people were having a lot of challenges and many had given their lives fighting for the freedom of their nation. Despite of these troubles people came together and had figured out ways to rebel and get their rights back to live in normal way and had achieved independence in August 1947. At that time if people had not learned lessons from their problems they would not have achieved what they wanted.
So I feel that it is very important to learn from our limitations, when we are in troubles. As these lessons would be useful for us to gain success.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, so, i feel, in general, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1339.0 2235.4752809 60% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 284.0 442.535393258 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71478873239 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43285143768 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 215.323595506 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.577464788732 0.4932671777 117% => OK
syllable_count: 410.4 704.065955056 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.7529238766 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.6875 118.986275619 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.75 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8125 5.21951772744 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30700939657 0.243740707755 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101008538208 0.0831039109588 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.214610798957 0.0758088955206 283% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212631107593 0.150359130593 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.227381729298 0.0667264976115 341% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 14.1392134831 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 48.8420337079 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.1743820225 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 12.1639044944 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 100.480337079 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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