The well-being of a society is enhanced when many of its people question authority.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and s

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The well-being of a society is enhanced when many of its people question authority.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

The politically derived statement, “The wellbeing of society is enhanced when many of its people question authority” is unique in the sense that it’s true. Unlike how taxes are handled, or whether or not citizens should be able to carry fire arms, this statement is black and white, correct or in correct. Questioning authority not only enhances communication between the people and the government, but also prevents abuses of power by keeping officials in check.
The questioning of authority provides transparency for the public, and the more the public understands how and why authority figures act on certain issues the more cooperative and supportive they will be towards government efforts (assuming they agree with the decisions being made). Parallel to a young child wanting to know why their parent forbids them from playing with the stove, societies want to know why certain rules and regulations are in place. A child who is told “Because I said so” is more likely to act out of curiosity or spite and play with the stove. However, a child who is told that they risk burning their hand after asking to play with the stove will follow the parent’s directions. Constant dialogue regarding the operations and motivations between the public and authority will create a more cooperative and supportive relationship, allowing both groups to work together and accomplish new feats.
However, questioning authority is also important if the people do not agree with the ideas and motivations of those in power. By maintaining a vigilant role, the public is able to keep authorities in check, preventing an abuse of power. North Korea is a terribly powerful example of unchecked power due to a total disconnect between the people and the government. The Supreme Leader and his officials live in luxury while the people face starvation, however there is little call for revolution thanks to the total disconnect between the North Korean society and their government. Eliminating communication between the government and the people allows those in power to consolidate power and commit horrible crimes with no reprimands from their people, just as we see in North Korea.
That being said, authority is not inherently bad. In fact, it too is necessary for the wellbeing of society and should be respected. In a delicate balance, society and authority depend on each other. Authority unites us under specific motivations and regulations, while society pulls the country towards specific ideals and goals. With open communication and collaboration between the two comes trust and understanding, and this understanding give society the ability to either support authority or call for a new direction.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 205, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... true. Unlike how taxes are handled, or whether or not citizens should be able to carry fire a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, regarding, so, well, while, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 14.8657303371 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2298.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 434.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29493087558 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94162034306 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529953917051 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 720.0 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2832617708 60.3974514979 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.666666667 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1111111111 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.27777777778 5.21951772744 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136787461099 0.243740707755 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0478131934091 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0378413740364 0.0758088955206 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0916661970262 0.150359130593 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0334728756659 0.0667264976115 50% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.8420337079 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 100.480337079 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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