Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. Others believe that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
The correct motivation behind which majors a college student choses to study has been long since debated. Many individuals view college as an environment to realize one’s passions in life and to pursue them, whatever it may be while others view college as a tool acquire skills needed to land a big-salary position. While many universities still carry the former motto, the costs of tuition and lack of financial aid for students tells a different story. College may have been a sanctuary for experimentation in the past, however those times are gone. Students today should go to college to pursue careers or studies that lead to reliable income.
While it is true that not everyone goes to college to make money, the population of people that can afford to pay for tuition just for the sake of personal development is shrinking fast. As less money is being set aside for financial aid, the students and their families are forced to pick up more of the financial load. Upon graduation, the average college grad can expect to owe almost $40,000 for an undergraduate degree with only a nine-month grace period before bills start coming in. Unless these graduates are employed with a substantial salary from a field in high demand, they can expect to pay these bills back for 25 years! Then, if these students default on these federal loans, the taxpayers end up taking the hit, hurting everyone around them as well.
Additionally, although the arts do contribute to the greater good of society, the contributions artists make to the world are less tangible than that of doctors, computer scientists and researchers. The further development of technology can offer capabilities we never thought imaginable and individuals entering these fields have impressive chances at changing the world. As technology eradicates problems like food shortages, pollution and labor necessities, people as a whole will have more time to pursue other interest outside of their careers.
It is entirely possible that the artistic world could take a huge hit if students were encouraged elsewhere, however there are plenty of other outlets for individuals to further their artistic abilities. The internet for example, can provide free tutorials through youtube, and connect artists from around the globe to provide critiques. A college degree is not necessary to become a successful artist, just look at Andy Worhol or Banksy.
In the end, while individuals should be able to pursue their dreams and interests, college tuition has become too expensive to be a realistic outlet for anything other than a stepping stone to make a large salary. Going to college with a different plan all to often results in crippling debt that will be carried by the student or the tax payers for a lifetime.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, may, so, still, then, well, while, for example, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2323.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 458.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07205240175 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71024733011 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 215.323595506 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572052401747 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 733.5 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8184263811 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.647058824 118.986275619 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9411764706 23.4991977007 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82352941176 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206504197959 0.243740707755 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0669129414195 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428930535325 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110032744887 0.150359130593 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346991039608 0.0667264976115 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 100.480337079 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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