People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Why an individual interacts with the world and people around them has been debated since the creation of social sciences. Even today many theories still exist: some believe our lives are pre-determined by an ultimate being, others describe unique interactions between one’s DNA and environment. While there are still many conflicting theories today, most are founded on a core belief that our behavior is contingent with an outside influence.
From a cultural standpoint, we are brought up learning the unwritten rules of our society, what we should and shouldn’t do, and these rules look completely different depending on an individual’s location. In the United States for example, when two people meet each other for the first time, they engage in a handshake with their right hands. These individuals may not know why they shake with their right hand, but that is customary. However, if you go to east Asia, a handshake is less common, and will only result in a confused stare. These unwritten rules were not designed by us specifically, but we do abide by them to conform.
If we transition to a biological/psychological perspective evaluating one’s nature/nurture back -ground we have countless other examples of people trying to define why individuals act the way they do. Today, the leading theory in behavior psychology that explains why we act the way we do involves two different forces that we are not in control of, nature and nurture. Nature includes aspects of our lives like genetics, and our immediate environment, while nurture describes how we were brought up by our caregivers and friends. Current literature shows just how much power and influence these aspects have on our lives and success. If you separate identical twins and place them in two drastically different environments, they will act completely different, showing that it is not the individual him/herself that defines their own personality and success but how, where and who they were brought up by that determines their behavior.
No matter how you look at it, from a bible or a science textbook, the major determinant of one’s behavior stems from outside forces, specifically the surrounding culture and individual’s genes. Those that ignore or break the unwritten rules of society are often isolated as outcasts by the rest of society and are often labeled with a disability that often is tied to pathological genetics.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, may, so, still, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 33.0505617978 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2053.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 392.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23724489796 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12202794947 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558673469388 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 648.0 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4742783239 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.866666667 118.986275619 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1333333333 23.4991977007 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.21951772744 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138478148009 0.243740707755 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0476947264515 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0391852421465 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.086094348737 0.150359130593 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0167448805577 0.0667264976115 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.8420337079 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 100.480337079 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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