The well-being of a society is enhanced when many of its people question authority
Stating that the well-being of a society is enhanced when many of its people question authority, this view asserts that having doubt on authority's action is needed for development of society. In some senses, it is true that resisting to big power such as government, law is helpful for society to proceed. In my point of view, however, considering that most of authority have roles to stabilize society and many experts of a field are trained with many experience and study the field more than any other, following authority could be helpful to making better world.
Of course, many people would agree that ~~~ When it comes to that there are many people who resisted to improper but very powerful authority and those people left better society to next generation, it is recommended not to be bear. For example, in the history of Korea, Korea was colonized by Japan. although the power of army of Japan was very large and incomparable with Korean, many people organized a kind of 'resistance' and fought with japan army directly and other people gave them war chest with own budget. And, finally, their effort brought independence to Korea. This shows that importance of not bearing to improper power for rightness.
However, can we say always say that complaining about government is always helpful? My answer is no. Considering that many department and minister in government is sustaining the stability and safeness of the society, breaking the rules could be harmful to peace of a society. For example, in many countries, the law prohibit one's personal revenge to crimes or other people. If a man do personal revenge to a criminal, effect of laws which have suppressed the state of lawlessness would be break and the society will vanish. This shows that result of rash challenge to authority without considering the possible outcome.
Moreover, if we expand the meaning of authority to scholar part, considering that so-called, "professionals" are people who have studied the field and trained with many experiences of the field, ignoring their opinion could bring very big and bad results. For example, in my experience, when I started my research as undergraduate research student in my university, I thought that I can handle my subject of my article. But my professor said that the subject would be hard for undergraduate students. Although the professors said like that, I walked my way. As a result, I almost lost proper period time to graduate. This shows that the importance of hearing authority.
To summarize, few would disagree that authority can be purified by question and resistance of people and this can make the society better. However, considering that mostly, authority is consulted together by most of composition of the society to make stable society and that most experts are better than newbies because of many experience during few decades or ,even, whole life, it is better to follow the authority. Only foolish people would say that the only thing we have to do for better society is uprising to society
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 449, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[2]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun experience seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much experience', 'a good deal of experience'.
Suggestion: much experience; a good deal of experience
...any experts of a field are trained with many experience and study the field more than any other...
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Line 3, column 301, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Although
...of Korea, Korea was colonized by Japan. although the power of army of Japan was very lar...
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Line 5, column 119, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun department seems to be countable; consider using: 'many departments'.
Suggestion: many departments
...pful? My answer is no. Considering that many department and minister in government is sustainin...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun experience seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much experience', 'a good deal of experience'.
Suggestion: much experience; a good deal of experience
...erts are better than newbies because of many experience during few decades or ,even, whole life...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...of many experience during few decades or ,even, whole life, it is better to follow...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, moreover, so, well, for example, kind of, of course, such as, as a result, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.3162921348 221% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 50.0 33.0505617978 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2548.0 2235.4752809 114% => OK
No of words: 505.0 442.535393258 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04554455446 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74048574033 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83400863276 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475247524752 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 805.5 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.5282343081 60.3974514979 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.782608696 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9565217391 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86956521739 5.21951772744 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373063568434 0.243740707755 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0921254388185 0.0831039109588 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.128555594317 0.0758088955206 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214570239241 0.150359130593 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123320585591 0.0667264976115 185% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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