"While some leaders in government, sports, industry, and other areas attribute their success to a well-developed sense of competition, a society can better prepare its young people for leadership by instilling in them a sense of cooperation."
The topic raises a controversial issue that whether the young generation of a society need a sense of cooperation or competition to be leader on any particular sector. Indisputably, a sense of coperation is a salient quality in a leader. Nevertheless, in this competitive generation who lacks sense of competition find himself in a quagmire situation. Thus, i generally disagree with the argument that cooperation is the only quality we need to instill in a leader and rather argue that with the sense of competition one can be a true leader.
First of all, now a days job market has became very competitive. Therefore, to be part of the govermnent or the industry, first one need enter those organization by competing with millions of people. To illustrate this, let us look at the current scenario of Indian job market.For a government job in railway,in the post of Loco pilot, nearly 5 million people have applied for only three seats.In this circumstances, where people are not been able to get into the organisation, how anyone will manage to be the leader in it. Consequently, it is obvious competition is one of the quality that every young people should possess to be part of any organisation
Furthermore, country like India often suffer from economic crisis. The industry, be it is of hardware or of software is triving to get a good revenue all the time. That onus is on the employee as well. Specifically, when each and every job has become target based how anyone can do their job in a collaborative way as each and every one is having their own target to be accomplished. Both common sense and past experience told us that competition has been a part of everyworking people now a days. Hence, from all the evidence of omnipresense of competion in every field cleary makes it transparent that to be a leader you have to vie for your own position.
Admittedly, there are also some jobs which is not that competitive. This is true especially when it comes to academic activities where there are many people working on a same project looking for same outcome.Cooperation is the virtue for the team to do well. And its the duty of the leader to hold the whole group alltogether and stay focused by cooperation and dedication.But this doesnt make a strong case to oppose the position of not being competitive.
In conclusion,Although a sense of cooperation is needed in every field of organisations but without the sense of competition a leader cannot complete himself as a leader.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ne can be a true leader. First of all, now a days job market has became very competitive....
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...t or the industry, first one need enter those organization by competing with millions of people. T...
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...eople have applied for only three seats.In this circumstances, where people are no...
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...arget based how anyone can do their job in a collaborative way as each and every one is having their o...
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... do their job in a collaborative way as each and every one is having their own target to be accomp...
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... be accomplished. Both common sense and past experience told us that competition has been a par...
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... has been a part of everyworking people now a days. Hence, from all the evidence of omnipr...
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Suggestion: Cooperation
...a same project looking for same outcome.Cooperation is the virtue for the team to do well. ...
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...the virtue for the team to do well. And its the duty of the leader to hold the whol...
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...of not being competitive. In conclusion,Although a sense of cooperation is needed in eve...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, if, look, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2066.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 428.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82710280374 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15128282721 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.1544653113 60.3974514979 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.529411765 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1764705882 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.05882352941 5.21951772744 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 7.80617977528 218% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183648569585 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.062896380975 0.0831039109588 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0379180957818 0.0758088955206 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11028633456 0.150359130593 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0315192643244 0.0667264976115 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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