Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Young people are the future of any country because with their growth the country also grow in same proportion. But today's the younger generation is aiming at getting overnight success in their career. In present scenario nobody wants to work hard for success, but they want success on the very first step of their careers. In my opinion, I agree with the given statement because it is important for holistic development of the young generation as well as nation. There are some examples which supports my stance and make the statement strengthen.
Moreover, to achieve success people work for any years and work hard. For example, a child wants to become a singer and he want to get famous overnight in whole world which is not realistic goal. Because we have solid example of Hans Zimmer from Frankfurt, Germany and A.R.Rahman from Chennai, India both were determined to learn music from an early age. After the practice and hard work on such a long period they get successful and famous in the world. So, the young generation should encourage to make realistic and long-term goal and then divide it in small sub goals to achieve success.
Furthermore, when we eat chocolate or favorite snacks then it gives instant satisfaction and its taste stay for short time. The craving for chocolate and satisfies drive with eating chocolate is like seeking immediate fame and recognition. The short cut gives gratification but it never last for long time, it will diminish soon. Whereas when we cook meal and take then it gives long term fulfilment. Similarly, to achieve the long-term goals is difficult and time taking but the results stay for permanent.
Additionally, there is strong influence of imaginary world served by social media which affect the students to seek immediate success. For example, by watching movies and clicking their own pictures similar to heroes or heroines young people think they can also be an actor. It is not wrong or unappropriated to become an actor, but they think it is the only field which gives fame and recognition in world. Social media shows stories for entertainment, but the young generation get trapped in the imaginary world and feel it as a reality. For example, few days ago a movie released 'Gali Boys' in Bollywood which is based on real story of a rape singer. Young people like the movie and after few days so many people started singing rape songs and put their videos on social media. The story told about how hard to get success, but young generation just focus on the fame of star.
Finally, there are a huge difference between really successful people and imaginary successful people. Young generation should encourage to work hard to achieve real success rather than wasting their time and energy to gain success from shortcut. Because every shortcut meets to long journey of getting success.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 124, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...a child wants to become a singer and he want to get famous overnight in whole world ...
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Line 3, column 274, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Rahman
... Zimmer from Frankfurt, Germany and A.R.Rahman from Chennai, India both were determine...
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Line 5, column 245, Rule ID: SHORT_CUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'shortcut'?
Suggestion: shortcut
...ing immediate fame and recognition. The short cut gives gratification but it never last f...
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Line 5, column 288, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lasts'?
Suggestion: lasts
...rt cut gives gratification but it never last for long time, it will diminish soon. W...
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Line 9, column 248, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d energy to gain success from shortcut. Because every shortcut meets to long journey of...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, moreover, really, similarly, so, then, well, whereas, for example, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 14.8657303371 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2373.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 481.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93347193347 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51945031592 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505197505198 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 728.1 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.6951331238 60.3974514979 41% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.92 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.24 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44 5.21951772744 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 10.2758426966 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223792552101 0.243740707755 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0657527611285 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0442474707184 0.0758088955206 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121163736179 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0259743250365 0.0667264976115 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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