The diagram below shows the water cycle which is the continuous movement of water on above and below the surface of the Earth Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature

Essay topics:

The diagram below shows the water cycle, which is the continuous movement of water on, above and below the surface of the Earth.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature.

The diagram illustrates the cycle of water which happens on above and below the Earth’s surface.

To begin with, the water in the ocean evaporated, which caused by the heat produced by the sun, into the clouds above the ocean surface, in addition to that, ocean contributed about 60% of total water vapour in air. After the vapour water had already being condensed inside the clouds, the clouds were being blown away towards the mountains where also had snow. Because of that, clouds experienced a precipitation, where the clouds could not take all the water inside, and eventually started to pour heavily.

Some of the water would pile up into the lakes.Nonetheless, the remaining water would flow back into lower land due to the surface runoff with impervious layer, in order for the soil would not absorb the water. At the end, the water would be back to ocean and would have different concentration of salinity. Overall, this is a continuous cycle of water which will be happening every time.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
...eventually started to pour heavily. Some of the water would pile up into the lakes.None...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 48, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Nonetheless
... the water would pile up into the lakes.Nonetheless, the remaining water would flow back in...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, nonetheless, so, in addition, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 1.00243902439 698% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 835.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 170.0 196.424390244 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91176470588 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61087313685 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59171557455 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.588235294118 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 256.5 283.868780488 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.5282301374 43.030603864 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.285714286 112.824112599 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2857142857 22.9334400587 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.28571428571 5.23603664747 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273218319753 0.215688989381 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148381834664 0.103423049105 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127519694034 0.0843802449381 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244607518352 0.15604864568 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.138565006793 0.0819641961636 169% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.2329268293 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 61.2550243902 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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