The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The statistics illustrate the revenues earned from selling coffee and bananas which are labelled with Fairtrade in five particular countries over a half decade from 1999. The figures are measured with millions of euros.
Overall, in 1999, Switzerland was the biggest coffee seller, while its top place was taken by UK in 2004. Nevertheless, Switzerland played the leading role in sales of bananas throughout the surveyed period.
To be more specific, in terms of coffee’s sales, Switzerland sold 3 millions of euros in 1999, and this figure doubled in 2004. UK started its revenues at a half amount of its counterpart in Switzerland, whilst this data expanded to 20, becoming the primary coffee seller in 2004. Moreover, Denmark and Sweden shared the same change pattern, as which both increased their sales by 0.2, from 1.8 to 2 and 0.8 to 1 respectively.
As for the sales of bananas, Switzerland preserved the first place by tripled its sales from 15 to 47 during the measured period. UK and Belgium also significantly rose their revenues, with the change from 1 to 5.5 and 0.6 to 4 in turns. However, the sales of bananas in Sweden and Denmark both shrank to about a half of its initial figures.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
1. The statistics illustrate the revenues earned from selling coffee and bananas
The tables illustrate the sales of coffee and bananas //sales is not equal to 'revenues', there are more sentences with this issue
Definitions of revenue
noun
income, especially when of a company or organization and of a substantial nature. for example:
It would allow De Cairos to keep control of the company and at the same time would allow it to raise substantial revenues .
2. 'Belgium' is lost in coffee sales.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 10
No. of Words: 205 200
No. of Characters: 967 1000
No. of Different Words: 110 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.784 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.717 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.626 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 71 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 51 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 31 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 17 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.536 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.412 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.65 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.043 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 72, Rule ID: CD_DOZENS_OF[1]
Message: Use a singular form of the numeral here: '3 million'.
Suggestion: 3 million
...f coffee's sales, Switzerland sold 3 millions of euros in 1999, and this figure doubled ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, while, as for
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 33.7804878049 127% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1005.0 965.302439024 104% => OK
No of words: 205.0 196.424390244 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90243902439 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78388967377 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76579773678 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 106.607317073 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560975609756 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 289.8 283.868780488 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.5508832445 43.030603864 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.5 112.824112599 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 22.9334400587 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.7 5.23603664747 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145029267804 0.215688989381 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0575224940008 0.103423049105 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413442859094 0.0843802449381 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0945928408099 0.15604864568 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0176965600908 0.0819641961636 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.2329268293 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 61.2550243902 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.06136585366 109% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 40.7170731707 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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