A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.Write a letter to the com

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A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter
describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear sir,
I am writing this letter as a collective response from our society about sponsoring a sports team of the youngsters.
There are plethora of advantages of supporting the sports team. Firstly, children will not have to bother about financial requirements while participating in any of the tournament which will be held in the City. Secondly, it will serve as an impetus for them to perform well. Moreover, it will also save their pocket-money which they can utilise in other productive areas.
Concerts will address wider community of the reality as every age group will be able to enjoy during the performance. Furthermore, it will help in regulating all the members. It will help in bringing people of different cultures together.
In my opinion, organisation should spare money on supporting the teenagers. It will help in bringing out the hidden talent as well.
I believe that my advice will help your team in making decisions and I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours faithfully,
John

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear sir, I am writing this letter as a collective...
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Line 8, column 18, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing from you soon. Yours faithfully, John
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, while, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 4.92783505155 244% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 1.0 5.05154639175 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 32.9175257732 58% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 856.0 937.175257732 91% => OK
No of words: 168.0 206.0 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09523809524 4.54256449028 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60020574368 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84302065415 2.54303337028 112% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 127.690721649 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.672619047619 0.622605031667 108% => OK
syllable_count: 259.2 290.88556701 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.6169515315 44.8134815571 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.3333333333 76.5299724578 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.0 16.8248392259 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.58333333333 4.34317383033 198% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 7.41237113402 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0962946410245 0.216113520407 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0380163827444 0.0766984524023 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0369374286965 0.0603063233224 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0566183806461 0.12726935374 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0422064772797 0.0580467560999 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 8.37731958763 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 8.71597938144 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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