You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.
Write a letter to your friend. In your letter,
• give details of your study plans
• explain why you want to get a part-time job
• suggest how your friend could help you find a job
Dear John,
I am writing today to share the details of my college, and seeking your help. It’s been a long hunt to finalise the college but finally I have made up my mind to study and work in Toronto.
my college would be commencing March onwards. I have already registered myself for an accommodation in the hostel, within the premises of the university. Comprehending the expenses of food, stationery, travelling and accommodation, I was planning to work as a part timer. I have a three-year bachelor course, Which guarantees me a job post college within Toronto. Meanwhile, I can work and study simultaneously to ensure that I don’t overstress my parents.
As a remedy, and also as I understand that you are a local of Toronto, you might be knowing people who are looking for young enthusiasts to join them. As it’s something that I’ll be doing along my college, I would not mind doing the nightshift as well. looking forward for a positive response from you. It would be really nice to see you after so many years.
Hoping to hear from you.
Your friend,
Abhi Bhat
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: My
...mind to study and work in Toronto. my college would be commencing March onwar...
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Line 9, column 84, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'accommodation'.
Suggestion: accommodation
...s. I have already registered myself for an accommodation in the hostel, within the premises of t...
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Line 13, column 82, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...t you are a local of Toronto, you might be knowing people who are looking for young enthus...
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Line 13, column 264, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Looking
... not mind doing the nightshift as well. looking forward for a positive response from yo...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, look, really, so, thus, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 931.0 937.175257732 99% => OK
No of words: 189.0 206.0 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92592592593 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70779275107 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90845555005 2.54303337028 114% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.619047619048 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 280.8 290.88556701 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.9624542014 44.8134815571 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.6153846154 76.5299724578 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5384615385 16.8248392259 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.53846153846 4.34317383033 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244659757185 0.216113520407 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0862775547833 0.0766984524023 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0663807758198 0.0603063233224 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12743180197 0.12726935374 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0656303305988 0.0580467560999 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 8.37731958763 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.72 8.71597938144 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 8.62886597938 81% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.