You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.
Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
• give details of your study plans
• explain why you want to get a part-time job
• suggest how your friend could help you find a job
Hi James,
My departure date for Canada is drawing near; moreover, I am busy in doing my arrangement. I would be grateful if you could help me in finding a part-time job as I have very less time to search for a job.
I have enrolled for a full-time course in IDT-Institute in Ottawa, which is for four months. Further, to this my joining date confirmed to the very next day of my departure. Besides, the course is quite expensive; moreover, it will help me in improving my skills which helps me in finding a better career opportunity.
To aid in covering the cost of my study, accommodation, food and other daily expenses, I aim to find a part-time job as soon as possible. Not only the study fee but also, others are too expensive to afford individually.
I would wonder if you could ask among your colleagues, friends in other companies to see if they have at least a minimum job. So, that it helps me to survive in the initial days. I know you have a wide range of social network in Ottawa which you could do canvas for me, if you would mind.
I look forward to seeing you soon
Thanking you.
Best Wishes,
John.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 127, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[4]
Message: “So , that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ee if they have at least a minimum job. So, that it helps me to survive in the initial d...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, look, moreover, so, as for, at least
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 919.0 937.175257732 98% => OK
No of words: 208.0 206.0 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.41826923077 4.54256449028 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64221514086 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 127.690721649 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605769230769 0.622605031667 97% => OK
syllable_count: 289.8 290.88556701 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.1186316955 44.8134815571 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.5833333333 76.5299724578 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 16.8248392259 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 4.34317383033 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.94845360825 177% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286124311293 0.216113520407 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0988332986171 0.0766984524023 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0949080696635 0.0603063233224 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150522303944 0.12726935374 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100283229788 0.0580467560999 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 8.37731958763 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.06 8.71597938144 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 7.59969072165 100% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 41.2886597938 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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