You live in a room in college which you share with another student.However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find itvery difficult to work.Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letterdescribe the situatio

Essay topics:

You live in a room in college which you share with another student.

However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it

very difficult to work.

Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter

describe the situation

explain your problems and why it is difficult to work

say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear sir,

I am writing this letter to inform you about the difficulties with the allocation of sharing room at our college premises. I would like to bring to your notice about these problems and it is really hard for me to do my work.

As you might already have idea about how the rooms are allocated and mine is number 49 and the roommate I got is very irritating and at times intolerable. he never maintains any neatness and comes late night.

when he does so he is disturbing my sleep, this impacts my everyday schedule to work and disturbances in sleep might affect my whole day. if i am disturbed at the beginning of the day my whole day would ruin.

I am wondering if you could help me with this, by changing me to other room where the person would have same timing as mine do. this would help me a lot coping up with my work and bring me peace.

Waiting for your positive response at the earliest

Yours sincerely,

Amaron.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 156, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...ry irritating and at times intolerable. he never maintains any neatness and comes ...
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Line 19, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: When
... neatness and comes late night. when he does so he is disturbing my sleep, t...
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Line 19, column 139, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...ces in sleep might affect my whole day. if i am disturbed at the beginning of the ...
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Line 19, column 139, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ces in sleep might affect my whole day. if i am disturbed at the beginning of the ...
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Line 19, column 142, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... in sleep might affect my whole day. if i am disturbed at the beginning of the da...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, really, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 26.3917525773 83% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 813.0 937.175257732 87% => OK
No of words: 175.0 206.0 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64571428571 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63713576256 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40441770285 2.54303337028 95% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.622857142857 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 239.4 290.88556701 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.8162726251 44.8134815571 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.3333333333 76.5299724578 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4444444444 16.8248392259 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.55555555556 4.34317383033 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.49484536082 334% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21613399775 0.216113520407 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0914321011625 0.0766984524023 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0781295547428 0.0603063233224 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118906493326 0.12726935374 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0793507511953 0.0580467560999 137% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 8.37731958763 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 70.7449484536 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 7.45979381443 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 8.71597938144 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 7.59969072165 96% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 41.2886597938 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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