You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work.Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college.In the letter,•Describe the situ

Essay topics:

You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work.

Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college.

In the letter,

•Describe the situation

•Explain your problems and why is it difficult to work

•Say what kind of accommodation you would prefer.

Dear Sir or Madam,

i am writing this letter to inform about the issues, which i am facing in hostel while share room with same stream of student. We are the students of computer science subject and have classes at same time. Because of this, we are unable to use many things simultaneously.

First, we both have classes at same timeline and due to single bathroom attached in the hall, every time day starts with arguments to use bathroom, which leads any one of us to late for first lecture. Second, we being the students of computer science, we are required computer frequently. Some times,we agreed with different time slots to use common computer which is facilitate by hostel but situation become worse when we both have exam and required system at same time that creates so much of chaos and stress during the exam time.

Since we both are fighting with basic requirements and cannot handle situation together, we require your support to change either my room or roommate with different stream, so that we do not fight atleast for washroom and not late for their classes. Second if possible , please give me room near to cafe so that if required i can visit their and complete my assignment.

I look forward to hearing from you.

yours faithfully,

Ruchi Kalra

Votes
Average: 8.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
Dear Sir or Madam, i am writing this letter to inform about ...
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Line 5, column 60, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...etter to inform about the issues, which i am facing in hostel while share room wi...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , we
...required computer frequently. Some times,we agreed with different time slots to use...
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Line 7, column 343, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... agreed with different time slots to use common computer which is facilitate by h...
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Line 7, column 370, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'facilitated'.
Suggestion: facilitated
... slots to use common computer which is facilitate by hostel but situation become worse wh...
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Line 9, column 269, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...te for their classes. Second if possible , please give me room near to cafe so tha...
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Line 9, column 325, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...e room near to cafe so that if required i can visit their and complete my assignm...
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Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Yours
... I look forward to hearing from you. yours faithfully, Ruchi Kalra
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, second, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 5.05154639175 198% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1061.0 937.175257732 113% => OK
No of words: 221.0 206.0 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80090497738 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85565412703 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42354063818 2.54303337028 95% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 127.690721649 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62443438914 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 328.5 290.88556701 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.7701742315 44.8134815571 174% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.1 76.5299724578 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1 16.8248392259 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.9 4.34317383033 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 2.54639175258 314% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149125215822 0.216113520407 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618782967674 0.0766984524023 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0484031418818 0.0603063233224 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106687984264 0.12726935374 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049564247026 0.0580467560999 85% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 8.37731958763 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 70.7449484536 81% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 7.45979381443 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 8.71597938144 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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