You saw an advertisement for a skiing course in Canada but you have one or two problems and can’t stay for the whole course.Write a letter to the course director. In your letter• explain your interest in the course• describe your problems• find ou

Essay topics:

You saw an advertisement for a skiing course in Canada but you have one or two problems and can’t stay for the whole course.

Write a letter to the course director. In your letter

• explain your interest in the course

• describe your problems

• find out if a refund is possible

Dear Sir,

I am penning down this epistle to inform you about my unavailability for attending the skiing course which was advertised in Time of Canada on 20th September.

Firstly, I would like to tell you know that being an adventure sport lover, I was very excited to join this basic level snowboarding course to learn the right skills of ski down the snowy mountain.

As the duration of course was 30 days begging from 1st august to 30th August. I was not able to complete my entire course due to some social commitments which I have to fulfill during that time. My parents are coming from India on 20th august therefore I have to pick up them from airport on their arrival date which is 20th august. Due to this I would not be available for the course. I have made full payment by cheque. My cheque no: MQ345.

Lastly, I would be very grateful to you if you could return my course fee. I would be obliged if you look into the matter personally and arrange my refund at earliest. My account number is AIE22.

Looking forward to hear you soon.

Yours Faithfully,

Milan Desai.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 199, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... skills of ski down the snowy mountain. As the duration of course was 30 days be...
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Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... of ski down the snowy mountain. As the duration of course was 30 days begg...
^^
Line 17, column 197, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t earliest. My account number is AIE22. Looking forward to hear you soon. ...
^^^^^^^
Line 21, column 17, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to hearing'.
Suggestion: to hearing
...number is AIE22. Looking forward to hear you soon. Yours Faithfully, Mi...
^^^^^^^
Line 25, column 18, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o hear you soon. Yours Faithfully, Milan Desai.
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, lastly, look, so, therefore, of course, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.48453608247 147% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 5.05154639175 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 32.9175257732 94% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 913.0 937.175257732 97% => OK
No of words: 197.0 206.0 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6345177665 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74642080493 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37633943292 2.54303337028 93% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 127.690721649 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.634517766497 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 266.4 290.88556701 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.9230240186 44.8134815571 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.2307692308 76.5299724578 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1538461538 16.8248392259 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23076923077 4.34317383033 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205755000872 0.216113520407 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0705522323436 0.0766984524023 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0522858595831 0.0603063233224 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109042176703 0.12726935374 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0378297471108 0.0580467560999 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 8.37731958763 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 70.7449484536 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.98 8.71597938144 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 7.59969072165 97% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 41.2886597938 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 8.62886597938 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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