You travelled to another city on business last week and there was a problem with your hotel room Write to the hotel manager In your letter Tell the manager about the problems you had Explain to them how you feel about what happened Let them know what acti | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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You travelled to another city on business last week, and there was a problem with
your hotel room.
Write to the hotel manager. In your letter…
- Tell the manager about the problems you had
- Explain to them how you feel about what happened
- Let them know what actions you would like them to take.

Dear Manager,
I am Mr Shreyas Parab, who stayed at your hotel The Garden View at Nashik in room no 203. I was annoyed by pathetic early morning service and incapability to take immediate action for customer satisfaction.

I had an early morning train at 6.10 am to Pune on my checkout day from the hotel. The hot shower was not working and when I called up the room service, he told it will take a while to get it repaired, additionally he made no arrangements for bathing elsewhere in hotel premises. Above that, when I asked for the coffee, the receptionist denied by saying that the kitchen staff has not yet arrived.

It is really frustrating to have such a lousy morning start, I went by just washing face and empty stomach. The charges what I have paid were wasted, instead of staying in the hotel, I could have managed night travelling and saving my hotel expenses.

I would request you to grant me fifty per cent payment back or else provide free stay for a next visit to compensate with your negligence. Looking forward for your positive response.

Your's faithfully,
Shreyas Parab

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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS General Training

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 170, Rule ID: VB_A_WHILE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'take awhile'?
Suggestion: take awhile
...ed up the room service, he told it will take a while to get it repaired, additionally he mad...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, really, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 912.0 937.175257732 97% => OK
No of words: 194.0 206.0 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70103092784 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73207559907 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60316933643 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.70618556701 0.622605031667 113% => OK
syllable_count: 276.3 290.88556701 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4506325589 44.8134815571 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2 76.5299724578 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4 16.8248392259 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.3 4.34317383033 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.49484536082 334% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169373614326 0.216113520407 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0587660199421 0.0766984524023 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433466366444 0.0603063233224 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0893768970056 0.12726935374 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0190703045378 0.0580467560999 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 8.37731958763 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 70.7449484536 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 7.45979381443 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 8.71597938144 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 7.59969072165 107% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 41.2886597938 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, really, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments