Your child is going away on a school trip for three days to another country. The head teacher wants some parents to join the trip and you would like to go.
Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:
- Say why you would like to go
- Suggest what you could do to help during the trip
- Ask some more questions about the trip
Dear Sir,
My self Milan Desai, I am father of Aarav Desai (Roll No: D12) studying in grade-I. I am penning down this epistle to you regarding expression of my interest in accompanying pupils for three day school outing in Srilanka. Yesterday, I have come to know from my son that few parents are required for this trip.
Firstly, I would like to inform you that I had previously worked in Srilanka as a doctor in medical camp for three years, so, I am aware about their culture and most of the places. At the same time, I can help students by addressing their medical concerns. Besides this, I have very sound social contacts in Srilanka, that could be beneficial to us if our team faces any problems.
I can also help them with their daily exercise and can take care of them in case of any medical emergency. As i am a doctor, it would be useful for school to have me on this trip considering my medical expertise.
Lastly, I would like to know more about excursion. Could I have detail itinerary of this trip? Also, I would like to know about the hotel booking to prepare myself better for this trip.
Hoping to become a part of this trip and spend some good times with kids.
I look forward to hearing you soon.
Yours Sincerely,
Milan Desai.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 27, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'fathered'.
Suggestion: fathered
...ear Sir, My self Milan Desai, I am father of Aarav Desai Roll No: D12 studying in...
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Line 13, column 111, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...em in case of any medical emergency. As i am a doctor, it would be useful for sch...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, if, lastly, look, regarding, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 32.9175257732 131% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 26.3917525773 152% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1056.0 937.175257732 113% => OK
No of words: 230.0 206.0 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59130434783 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89432290496 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37773223598 2.54303337028 93% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 127.690721649 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608695652174 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 322.2 290.88556701 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.13402061856 164% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2606938513 44.8134815571 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.4285714286 76.5299724578 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4285714286 16.8248392259 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42857142857 4.34317383033 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 7.41237113402 148% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186958134628 0.216113520407 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695219862514 0.0766984524023 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0504831187363 0.0603063233224 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0945324637664 0.12726935374 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0309202101357 0.0580467560999 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 8.37731958763 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 70.7449484536 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 8.71597938144 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 7.59969072165 105% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 41.2886597938 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.