Many people now undertake extreme activities, from hang-gliding to mountain climbing. Why do people risk their lives in this way, and do you think this is a good trend?
Despite the fact taking adventurous sport means skating on thin ice, these activities have become more prevalent among the population than ever. From my perspective, there is a variety of different justification for this phenomenon and this is probably a positive tendency
To initiate, there are various reasons why numerous people are intrigued by these aforementioned activities. One fundamental explanation is that extreme sports are able to offer them the emotion and feelings that no other sports game can. It does not seem unreasonable to claim that people taking part in these adventurous sports often have extraordinary amusement and happiness. This phenomenon is due to the fact that extreme activities stimulate the human brain to produce a significant amount of adrenaline which took responsibility for the above-referenced emotion. Furthermore, for several people, surmounting a mountainous mountain is synonymous with overcoming themselves. Therefore, participants are subsequently fulfilled with a sense of achievement after accomplishing a performance of these extreme sports.
On the other hand, in my standpoint, this is apparent that undertaking in extreme activities is a good trend. The first and foremost advantageous impact of participating in these activities is that it can enhance the self-confidence and morale deep inside a person. There seems to be evidence that people surpassing the fear of death have a tendency of developing an everlasting belief about themselves, as a result, they are less likely to give up in their tough time. Another plus point that is worth considering is that participating in extreme sports can provide players with opportunities to broaden their horizons. By the way of exemplifying, joining extreme activities enable people to meet and interact with people from every segment of the society, thereby allowing them to have social contacts and relationships that may necessary in the future
In conclusion, several people now choose to undertake extreme activities because of the extreme feelings these activities gave them. Then, it can be considered as a good trend since it improves self-confidence as well as create the opportunity to broaden one's horizon
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 256, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ll as create the opportunity to broaden ones horizon
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, may, so, then, therefore, well, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, by the way, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1888.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 339.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.56932153392 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.29223627811 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572271386431 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 506.74238477 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.6868878949 49.4020404114 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.230769231 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0769230769 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.61538461538 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260958749796 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.084056960986 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765488133126 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160047142279 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04574498951 0.056905535591 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 13.0946893788 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.17 50.2224549098 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.32 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.4 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.78957915832 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 256, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ll as create the opportunity to broaden ones horizon
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, may, so, then, therefore, well, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, by the way, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1888.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 339.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.56932153392 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.29223627811 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572271386431 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 506.74238477 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.6868878949 49.4020404114 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.230769231 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0769230769 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.61538461538 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260958749796 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.084056960986 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765488133126 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160047142279 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04574498951 0.056905535591 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 13.0946893788 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.17 50.2224549098 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.32 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.4 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.78957915832 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.