One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.
Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
Human life expectancy has been increasing at a rapid rate thanks to the advancement in medical care, which means that we can now expect to live much longer than our ancestors just a few generations ago. While longevity could be disadvantageous to some degree, I personally believe that this phenomenon brings more benefits to both individuals and society.
On the one hand, there are some drawbacks of longer lifespan that people now are facing. Firstly, human longevity is one of the primary causes of overpopulation, which results in some environmental issues. Undoubtedly, a growing population leads to increasing demand for resources, such as coal or gas, which consequently causes climate change due to carbon dioxide emissions. What’s more, aging population put a huge financial burden on society. The rising proportion of elderly people means that a larger amount of national budget must be allocated for pensions and healthcare. A prime example is Japan, which is home to the oldest citizenry in the world with 27% of its population being 65 years of age or older. It is projected that by 2025 health care spending in this country will rise 70 percent, nursing home care by 160 percent and pensions by 40 percent.
Nonetheless, I firmly believe that be advantages of longer life expectancy of human beings outweigh the demerits. As for individuals, longevity promotes the harmonious relationship among family members. Many parents sacrifice most of their life to their offsprings. Therefore, when people live longer, it will be an opportunity for their children to return the care and show their filial respect for their parents. Otherwise, It would be a pain and regret for many people. In terms of society’s benefits, longer lifespan allows people to contribute more to the world with their talent and wisdom. Many prominent scientists and scholars and other elites died with regret that they could not accomplish their plan. For instance, Marie Curie, who is a world-famous physicist and chemist. Her findings in her scientific research are great contributions to medicine, such as the treatment of neoplasms using radioactive isotopes and X-ray. If she could live longer, there might be more contributions to the science world.
In conclusion, although increasing lifespan may have some bad points, I reckon that this phenomenon is much more beneficial to everyone as well as society.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2032.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 386.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26424870466 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94858261542 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 176.041082164 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588082901554 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6077712384 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.6 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.55 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191929121957 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0509350150378 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0561484712887 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106996624187 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0550216273709 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 78.4519038076 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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