At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Essay topics:

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

many people believe that the disadvantages young people number is far more than the older people in some nation outweigh the advantages. Personally, I am convinced that, this case have many positive effect to the society and the country.

On the one hand, there are too many young adults than old people in a country can lead to some demerits. First of all, the criminal rate may rise rapidly if a nation have more young people than old people. it can be clearly seen that, adolescents tend to be involve to some society ‘ vices like drugs, drunken or car accident if we don’t pay attention and give them the true direction. Moreover, another weak point is the social services quality like education and medical. The more children a nation have the more pressure government get because they have to overcome the lack of education and medical service for all their children. As a result, many children have to face the problems that they can not participate school or go to the hospital when they get sick if they live in property.

On the other hand, there are several arguments in favour of the outstanding between the number of young people in comparison with old people. The most important reason is the young adults can lead to the sharp increase in the labour worker. Nowadays, if a nation have large proportion of worker, they will get the big positive aspect. Consequence, their economic will develop dramatically and they will have more advantages than others competitor. Meanwhile, young people can make the population remain stables. Today, nation population of many countries like Japan are drop significantly due to the older people number surge, it is a serious problem so younger population bring some positive effect to the country. because of these reasons, we can easily understand the benefit of young residents bring to the government and their nation.

To sum up, although young adults may make some troubles for society but their role in the development of a country is very important. government should try to figure out how to reduce the negative effect and improve the positive effects of young people.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, moreover, so, while, as a result, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1789.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 361.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95567867036 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56827190837 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512465373961 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 571.5 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7641253823 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.235294118 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2352941176 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.70588235294 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175527127063 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0599762682719 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0560787892644 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120355481664 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0522574142205 0.056905535591 92% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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