It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

natural talents or training, which one is the most importance to make a chid become a master in sport or music is the hot topic of discussion. However, a lot of people argue that certain talents is more important than training but In my front of view, training is the most necessary for children to become a good sports person or a musician.

First, natural talents make children improve their skill more easily. I completely agree because many research carry out by scientist, professors come from many famous international university prove that everybody have their own intelligence in some major like math, music, language , body skill …. so their intelligence will make them learn how to sing, how to play an instruments, or break the record quickly to compare with others people. In addition , the children without certain talents may get hard to reach the same level with the others , who are born with natural talents. they may feel it s very difficult to improve their skill because they have no advantages. More over, music or art need natural talents of individual people to make the different from the others people. when you become a musician, it s very importance to be the only one if you wane be famous , for this reason certain talents is necessary.

On the other hand, I belive that natural talents is necessary but training is more impotarnt to make a child become a good sports or a musician. even a child was born with out certain talents but if they patient and spend more time to practice they ll be a sports good person or a musician. There are many musicans or athletics don’t have some advantages like the others. some musician is deaf and it easy to find an athletic don’t have an ideal body but they still success cause the practice with their heart. Further more, every genius have to practice very hard to shinning. Of course , in music and sport it s true. every famous athletics and musicans trained when they were young, and they keep training every day, so it s possible to teach a child to become a successful person in music and sport. Last but not lead, natural talents mean nothing without training because “ no pain, no gain”. A child was born with certain talents may not success in sport or music if they don’t receive the good education and the adults don’t care about them.

In conclusion, even a lot of people thinks the certain talent is the most important things to make a child success in sport and music, I still belive that patient training and spend time for that is the only way for children to be a master.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, so, still, in addition, in conclusion, of course, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 10.4138276553 221% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2139.0 1615.20841683 132% => OK
No of words: 455.0 315.596192385 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7010989011 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48295798198 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.430769230769 0.561755894193 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 668.7 506.74238477 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.0991490299 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.578947368 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9473684211 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.10526315789 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.01903807615 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298477814907 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103113223259 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.082558174792 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2071065375 0.151304729494 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0355423425404 0.056905535591 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.69 8.58950901804 78% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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