At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
It is true that the number of young adults in some countries are more than elderly people. I do believe that advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
On the one hand, there are some disadvantages for having more young people than old people. Firstly, young people will miss the idol, it is clear that old people have more experience in life than young people, and that helps young people to get more knowledge and become ready for the practical life. Secondly, families will be apart, because they will miss the leaders who will gather the young generations and build the sense of love within the family. Finally, the extinction of old people by time, will have a very bad effect on community. For example, there are a lot of official positions are filled by the old adults, and the dramatic decline of old people means a disaster, as there is will be a gap between age groups.
On the other hand, there are even more advantages of having large number of young adults. To begin with, as we all know the future in young generations who will become in the future the leaders. The young people born and raised in technology era and they always like to use the technology in a way that would help them achieving their goals. Therefore, if the old adults in the government positions were replaced by these young people, a new things that will happen that would benefit communities. Furthermore, more young people means more fertility and that has a great role to keep the population increasing.
In conclusion, however there are disadvantages for the dramatic drop of the number of old people, but still the advantages of having more young people outweigh these disadvantages.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 320, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to achieve' or 'achieve'.
Suggestion: to achieve; achieve
...echnology in a way that would help them achieving their goals. Therefore, if the old adul...
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Line 5, column 443, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'thing'?
Suggestion: thing
...e replaced by these young people, a new things that will happen that would benefit com...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, for example, in conclusion, it is true, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1391.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81314878893 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57948208076 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477508650519 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 439.2 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5064984285 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.0 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2307692308 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.9230769231 7.06120827912 183% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209648912108 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100951500091 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0813725638407 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18789267487 0.151304729494 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.082048288379 0.056905535591 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 78.4519038076 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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