At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

There is no doubt that a large number of teenagers is considered a controversial issue today. While there are many of the advantages of increasing number of youth, there are some disadvantages for that. I would argue that the benefits of this increasing outweigh the disadvantages.
On the one side, there are people arguing that there are some disadvantages such as a less experience in the society. Moreover, the adolescence is considered a big problem for parents. For example, despite the Arab countries has the highest rates almost 60% for youth, no advancement in their societies. As consequence, it is not important to have the high rate of youth to consider developed country.
Turning to another side, there are many benefits for increasing the proportion of teenagers. First of all, the rising the rate of young people produced a creativity in the society and helps the government to launch a big project. In addition, the young persons increase the percentages of fertility inside the country. Therefore, no fear about these societies in declining the population. For instance, if the proportion of youth with 25 years is more than old ones, the rate of birth will rise and the number of children will increase also. As a result, the youngest societies for a country, the more creativity, and shining future.
In conclusion, even though, there are many drawbacks for the rate of adults in the country, there are many advantages for increasing teenagers in the society. I completely agree the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 24, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
There is no doubt that a large number of teenagers is considered a controversial...
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Line 3, column 536, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...nd the number of children will increase also. As a result, the youngest societies fo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1294.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 253.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11462450593 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00280298369 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 176.041082164 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505928853755 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 414.0 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.8347013163 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 86.2666666667 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8666666667 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.86666666667 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130669110083 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0497115380804 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053840676132 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0970058428382 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0746844235031 0.056905535591 131% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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