At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.

Essay topics:

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.

Nowadays, in most countries the number of adults aging below 60 is higher than those who are older. While this phenomenon can bring some benefits for the society, in my view, the drawbacks of this issue is more.
The domination of young adults has a range of positive sides for both companies and ordinary people. If the majority of employees in a firm are categorized in the young age groups, the work productivity can be improved. The reason why this is assumed is that people aging between 30 to 60 are typically competent enough at their job, meaning that they have academic and practical qualifications simultaneously. As a result, company is able to earn a huge profit. In addition, being in the minority, senior citizens make less problems for the younger generation. In fact, in this condition, young adults do not have to spend a part of their time to take care older people, resulting in being more active in their families.
However, there are several negative points stemming from this new trend. Firstly, the more young adults there are currently, the more retired person there will be in the near future. Consequently, the number of people receiving retirement benefits will increase, which can make serious problems for governments as they are expected to supply required money. This is an issue that some European countries like Germany face with. Secondly, the necessity of providing the elderly with medical facilities may also increase, leading to putting extra financial pressure on local councils. Finally, the reduction in old population can be detrimental for families as there is nobody to look after the new generation when their parents work out.
In conclusion, although it seems that having more productive workers can benefit the society, I believe that the disadvantages of aging population outweigh the advantages.

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 520, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun problems is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...g in the minority, senior citizens make less problems for the younger generation. In...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, while, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1551.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1357615894 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76796831844 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609271523179 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 9.0 2.52805611222 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0915509023 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.4 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1333333333 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5333333333 7.06120827912 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155969810666 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0479033859846 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0444601671105 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0878365931105 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0347196967561 0.056905535591 61% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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