In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

Essay topics:

In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

Growing obesity rate is a problem of controversy. Health international organization have informed people about its toll on the body. There is a plenty of research that introduces several main reasons for this issue. long working hours is one of the main reasons which inflict people to eat junk foods which have low nutritive value in compare of traditional foods. Fast food store often uses low quality material for cooking which is causes increasing amount of calories and fat in the foods that enters the human body and made damages in some cases.

Also, it should be noted that lack of exercising is another reason which can be observed in the under developed countries more than developed countries. Culture of every region play an important role in people life. People who used to play a sport regularly since their child hood have higher level of health and fitness in respect to other. Plus, laziness can be reason for not exercising. For example, Japanese learn kids to play sport weekly which lead to increasing of living hope between them.

Ill-informing people by government is another reason. Well-educating people about foods and hazards of overeating decreases the amount of obese people. For instance, people who used fried foods can boil them or cook them in another healthier way.

To wrap it up, I strongly believe media can play an important role in solving this issue. It can inform people and modify their culture about exercising that both, together would have strong impact on average level of health and fitness in the world.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Long
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, well, for example, for instance, in some cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1300.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 260.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49109657183 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.596153846154 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 404.1 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.7982455772 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.6666666667 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 7.06120827912 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173948954291 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0568207897847 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0395285466998 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106629921045 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278997295717 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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