In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this. | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

Work and
travelling helps a lot in between a gap of studies. Young people are encouraged
to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university
studies in lot of  well developed countries.
They are many number of advantages compared to disadvantages in this argument. Work
gives experience, travelling gives general knowledge.<o:p></o:p>

There are
several advantages to explain about work and travel. According to work student
gains knowledge on their subjects and improve their skills, they can meet
experts in their future  study field and  also to  gathering information. It helps  to find professional companions and competitors
that leads to fast communication so that people can up come with their disabilities
like stage fear and nerves to speak etc. The main important thing is they can
earn money that helps them to pay their fee in future education .Going back to travelling,
it helps students to explore more about society and nature. In this process of
travelling, students face lot of new experiences based on society. It helps
students to understand the problem in real life and can face nature’s beauty. Travelling
makes student to meet new people, interaction with them teaches a lot in their
journey and seeks great traditions, through that people can understand the
value of culture. This is the best way to experience new places and interaction
with new people. <o:p></o:p>

However
there are some disadvantages also  in
this argument like while working students may forget their goals in the
processes of new job and they can lose their concentration towards studies .Travelling
gives good experience but at the same time people need to bear the cost moreover,
they  loose one year of time and experience.<o:p></o:p>

Work gives knowledge,
experience, new goals and it helps a lot to habituate work. Travelling leads to
interact with new people and experience their cultures   tradition too. <o:p></o:p>

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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 10, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun number seems to be countable; consider using: 'many numbers'.
Suggestion: many numbers
...bsp;well developed countries. They are many number of advantages compared to disadvantages...
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Line 16, column 64, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...hem to pay their fee in future education .Going back to travelling, it helps stud...
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Line 16, column 66, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Going
...m to pay their fee in future education .Going back to travelling, it helps students ...
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Line 28, column 75, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...lose their concentration towards studies .Travelling gives good experience but at...
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Line 28, column 77, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Travelling
...se their concentration towards studies .Travelling gives good experience but at the same ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, well, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2516.0 1615.20841683 156% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 7.76543209877 5.12529762239 152% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 11.9933617264 2.80592935109 427% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533950617284 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.0 1.60771543086 124% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 194.990092299 49.4020404114 395% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 193.538461538 106.682146367 181% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9230769231 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15384615385 7.06120827912 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 29.0 4.38176352705 662% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134295783544 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0798107150005 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137211142243 0.0667982634062 205% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0609936166203 0.151304729494 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103177067331 0.056905535591 181% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 27.6 13.0946893788 211% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 13.28 50.2224549098 26% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.4 11.3001002004 154% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 28.08 12.4159519038 226% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 28.0 10.7795591182 260% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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