Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money.
Do you agree or disagree?
Which other types of job should be highly paid?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
It is often argued that the individuals working in the entertainment industry such as film actors, singers, and musicians, or even sports players are too much highly paid. Whereas, there are various other professions that require a much more complex skillset. In my opinion, I completely agree with this statement that the entertainment stars are too much highly paid with respect to the skillset they possess.
It is true that the entertainment industry is booming and making billions of dollars. But if we analyze it properly it is simply overvalued. Here all the stars, actors, or players are paid on the basis of fame they possess or the craze about them in youngsters, which I believe is totally unfair. What is fairer, all of them must be paid on the basis of the quality of skillset they possess. For instance, if a new actor or player is about to enter the industry, he/she will always be highly paid. Neither that person is eminent nor tested for the skillset he/she possesses in the real world. Then why are they paid too much? Instead, people working in making them shine in front of the audience should be paid a handsome amount. Just as in the case of international or national-level sports, coaches or co-workers must also be highly paid.
There are numerous other professions as well, which clearly entails a huge skillset, technical knowledge, and an intellectual mindset. Acquiring these kinds of skills requires years of training, study, competition, research, and hard work. For instance, being a doctor is a marvelous profession as this person is even able to save lives sometimes. A scientist provides new findings to humankind which in turn ables us to advance in the technologies further. A soldier, the profession of this person is restless, he took an oath to protect his country, even if it is at the expense of his own life. A laboring man, the hard work requires for this profession is unmatchable. All these professions really need to be recognized and valued.
Weighing up both sides of the argument, I completely agree that there is a myriad of professions out there that needs to be paid a handsome amount, in contrast to this salaries paid in the entertainment industry need to be regulated based on the skill set an individual possesses.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, so, then, well, whereas, for instance, in contrast, such as, in contrast to, in my opinion, it is true, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 13.1623246493 213% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1894.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 387.0 315.596192385 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89405684755 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83104860097 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516795865633 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 570.6 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0631716602 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.7 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.35 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223622300628 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0671852346075 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0572640085859 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143682361465 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0720396497285 0.056905535591 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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