Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give y

Essay topics:

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, there are divergent ideas arose to enhance the health condition of public. Some people reckon that developing the number of sport facilities would be the upper most solution while others suppose this can not exert many impact and more visionary measures are in need. This will shed some light and expand my partial support on both view before drawing any conclusion.

FIrst of all, admittedly, sports are of paramount importance to citizens' health status physically and mentally. It is worth noting that in recent scenarios, the increasing host of workers spend less time practicing exercises and strengthening their relationships. Building more sports facilities such as gym, swimming pool would motivate them to take up better lifestyle and perceive the necessity of moving in their daily routine. Otherwise, people, especially teenagers, will greatly suffer from health problems, obesity and diabetes for example, and even some disorders like depression or autism. Apparently, with the emergence of these constructions, it raises our awareness of improving health condition and facilitate us pursue sports.

On the other hand, to optimally address this issue, eating diet can not be deducted from the list. It should take into account that health depends 70 per cent on metabolism or in the other word, food intake chiefly influence all people lives. Teenagers are confronting a warning sign of overweight or cardiovascular diseases due to the excessive consumption of junk food. Therefore, restricting the development of this food also need considering for our health betterment. Some measures can have immediate effect, for instance, imposing tax on the fast food advertisement or running healthy diet campaign.

On the whole, both sports and diet play complementary role that would not have any substitutes towards citizens' health status. Thus, people had better balance their food intake and exercises to become more robust physically and mentally.

Votes
Average: 9 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 225, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun impact seems to be countable; consider using: 'many impacts'.
Suggestion: many impacts
...while others suppose this can not exert many impact and more visionary measures are in need...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, first, if, so, then, therefore, thus, while, even so, for example, for instance, such as, first of all, on the whole, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1678.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53795379538 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82819990859 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.650165016502 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.411713464 49.4020404114 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 111.866666667 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267712794809 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0778172072386 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455452051514 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154829820134 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0490514854607 0.056905535591 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.85 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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