Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
In today’s rapidly globalizing world, different precautions about dwellers’ health quality continue to be a controversial topic in some respects. There are valid opinions on both sides, which I will discuss now.
On the one hand, because of busy and intense working schedule, people can hardly find spare time to improve their health status, for instance doing push-ups or cycling. In other words, spreading gym centers in every neighborhood could save employees’ time and they may be easily encouraged by personal trainers to save their physical appearances, meaning that not having health related problems. Furthermore, since sedentary lifestyle brings some health issues such as cardiac problems or obesity, many workers may be absent from their jobs with the helping of medical reports and this can lead disruption in economical circulation of a country. As a result of, it might be said that increasing the number of gym facilities could prevent such ailments easily among people, especially, employees.
On the other hand, one major initiative in order to increase public well-being could be maintained in schools by giving conferences about meaning of health. Namely, visual representation of various disorders and their causes as well as possible remedies could be more realistic and beneficial for pupils and they can shape their future health in a better way with the help such extracurricular programs. Secondly, governments and authorities may subsidize medical check-ups as monthly or annually for their citizens. Since such medical process may exacerbate the financial burden on people, they would show reluctance in order to go to hospitals. Overall, I feel that public health should be created with different measures, because the practicable side of giving conferences and free medical opportunities outweighs the other one which is increasing the number of sports facilities. This is as long as children are given visual health speech, to show them the realistic side of health problems, and that free check-ups system itself maintains regular system for everyone.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, i feel, such as, as a result, as well as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1781.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51393188854 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93727621468 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597523219814 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.672155418 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.416666667 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9166666667 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5833333333 7.06120827912 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202059771705 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0732272605639 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0517137602151 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126804876818 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.03808803635 0.056905535591 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.77 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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