Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.Discuss both these views and give yo

Essay topics:

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Public health is always a controversial matter. some people believe that sports are the answer to this problem, but other think this matter goes further away than just sports.

Practising sports are great factor to prevent health issues and this is comproved scientifically. Their is a study in UK tested during 2 years with people in a vary of age groups and the group who was consistently practising sports they were never sick. The group that were sedentary they got sick easily. In my opinion having an active live with sports or even a walk during the day helps to improve the immunity system and our body gets stronger to attack when it needed, so increasing the sports areas in all neighbourhood with some equipments and nice and tide space for the practice will help everyone to not get sick.

On the other hand the other part of the population believes that sports are not enough to keep everyone health. Because of that the government should build more hospitals, rose the number of General practitioners in each suburbs, subsidy more studies to make new vitamins or give more free vaccination to the citizens, even a better rebate in a medical consultation to prevent a future sickness.

In conclusion health will be always a difficult subject to discuss as everyone has a divergent opinion. However I strongly believe that if the government introduce the sports practices and bring this to the people eventually with all the results and facts proving it they will understand and accept better.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1275.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98046875 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64482550062 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.61328125 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 384.3 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.0517662084 49.4020404114 176% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.5 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.9 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199471881365 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0844552257237 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530344916906 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121797168056 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0450570600423 0.056905535591 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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