some people think that the advantages of advertising sports products through famous sports players outweigh the disadvantages. to what e do you agree or disagree.

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some people think that the advantages of advertising sports products through famous sports players outweigh the disadvantages. to what e do you agree or disagree.

In the present age, a number of well-known players are doing different types of product advertisements. In this essay, we will throw some light on the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

Let’s begin by looking into the merits of endorsements by sportspersons. Firstly, players can promote certain products in a better way because they themselves use some of these items in their line of work. Sachin Tendulkar, for example, does the advertisement of an energy drink which he consumes while playing the game. because of this reason, his endorsement of the product sounds genuine. Secondly, players can make money by doing various types of advertisements. In general, advertisement companies give approximately 25-50 lakhs to the players who work for them. this is a great opportunity for them to convert their popularity and brand value into money.

On the other hand, there are some downsides to these celebrity endorsements. Primarily, this could take away the players’ focus from the game. To elucidate, last year, Virat Kohli, a renowned Indian cricketer, was not able to perform as expected in Asian Cup. some people assert that this happened because he was featured in myriads of advertisements at that time which took his concentration away from the match. Furthermore, athletes could become money minded if they do a lot of advertisement campaigns. The result of this could be devastating for the players and ruin their game play. What’s more, sometimes players endorse poor quality products just because they are offered truckloads of money. In my opinion, this is a misuse of the trust their admirers have placed in them.

In conclusion, there is no doubt that popular players are advertising several products and this phenomenon has some obvious drawbacks and benefits which are given in the above paragraphs. All in all, it is up to the players to decide whether or not they should do these types of advertisements.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, look, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in general, no doubt, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1650.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22151898734 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01233909596 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591772151899 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.6299429295 49.4020404114 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 86.8421052632 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6315789474 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.21052631579 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17543318008 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0548187660361 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0371388396772 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121487791483 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0109514481374 0.056905535591 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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