Some people think that the best way to reduce time spend travelling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city center with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree.
Discuss both of the views and give your opinion.
The urbanization of city has bring both advantages and disadvantages. People have to spend more and more time travelling to and from work because of the expansion of cities. Some people suggest that apartment buildings should be planted near the city center to replace the parks and gardens. I think people should take more consideration of this idea.
On the one hand, if this idea can be well carried out, it could effectively reduce the commuting time for many workers. Living in the apartment buildings close to work can help save a lot of time since the commuters do not have to spend too much time on traveling. They can even walk to their offices, therefore they are no longer troubled by the heavy traffic in big cities on their way to and from work.
On the other hand, however, residences and workers might be bothered by other things. Since many people live just near the center, it obviously cause too much pressure for it. Just imagine what the center would look like when millions of people moved in or out of the numerous apartment buildings. The center would become more crowded and polluted than before. What’s more, people still need parks and garden to entertainment, and they have to spend even more time, maybe few hours or even longer, to travel to a place for taking a little rest. In the long term, people are not able to find the pleasure that is so important for their work and life, and the benefits they get from shortened travelling time would be undone.
In summary, there are some better measures could be used to solve this issue. For example, using advanced telecommunication technologies on work. So workers can work from home, which reduce their commuting time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use past participle here: 'brought'.
Suggestion: brought
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Message: Did you mean 'causes'?
Suggestion: causes
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, may, so, still, therefore, well, for example, i think, in summary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1421.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80067567568 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51547211905 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554054054054 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 440.1 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7715645122 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.8125 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4375 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312798893368 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0980745386559 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0545133729101 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188445625769 0.151304729494 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0599524331424 0.056905535591 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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