Some people think that government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
As has been known that due to globalization world has become a global village which makes easy to get a variety of food despite of any cultural, traditional food of any country on the table. Many are opine that due to diversity of food children are becoming obese and the real culprit is government for this phenomenon. I partially agree with this notion.
To commence with, first and foremost parents have hectic schedule in this haste-paste life and incapable to keep an eye on the diet of their wards. Therefore, children are allowed to eat anything which is unhealthy and full of fat (Burgers, pizzas etcetera) which increases the obesity rate. Apart from this, advertisements plays an prominent role in this criteria. The reason is, mouth-watering pictures of junk foods easily lured juveniles and then they demand of these foods and when parents fulfill their desires. Consequently, it affect child health (making them fat). Furthermore, stress can be considered as a basic cause this dilemma too because work load from schools indulge students to eat more and more while completing assignments , projects.
The part of higher authorities cannot be neglected ,basically government issue license to restaurants , cafes without any restrictions on food provided to children's. For instance a survey has reported in its report on children that proportion of consuming fatty foods is on its peak which is a red alarming symbol of deteriorating health of wards in future. Additionally, technology is a hidden worm for this as children love to play on gadgets rather than to participate in outdoor activities, and do not have workout routine which is also an another factor to rise obesity among children.
To conclude, from above confabulation it is axiomatic that government is not solely liable but there are various factors involve in this menace. Meanwhile it is the united responsibility of each and every guardian of children to make them habitual of having balanced diet.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, so, then, therefore, while, apart from, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1664.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16770186335 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89826483153 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.639751552795 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0859910803 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.857142857 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21428571429 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146041953598 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0479223353459 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0402570031041 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0914394375161 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0356905894037 0.056905535591 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.68 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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