“Some people think that governments should ban dangerous sports, while others think people should have freedom to do any sports or activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion”
It is true that there is a widespread concern over the practice of extreme sports on safety grounds. As a result, it does not seem so surprising that many people argue that authority agencies should ban athletes from playing dangerous sports. Whereas, I still believe that people should be free to practice if they so wish.
On the one hand, there are many reasons coined to explain why the government should introduce an official restriction on the one who plays dangerous sports. The main reason is safety. There have been numerous incidents that members of rescue services have had to put their own life into risks in order to save extreme sports enthusiasts who are in life-threatening. Another factor is the degradation of the high quality of national labor. Someone does not have enough experience but they also take up these sports because of their passion sometimes prone to have eternal trauma which can lead to lost the ability to carry on their work.
On the other hand, I concur with those who argue that people should be free to chose whatever sports as long as they really like. Firstly, nowadays, the explosion in technology has made essential sport gear which has the capacity of protecting those who practice unhealthy sports takes off. Such equipment range from safety ropes and helmets to water-resistant clothing. Secondly, it is a great importance of the freedom when people decide to practice something they like, which can create more and more opportunities for such people to promote all of their ability.
To sum up, although many risks have been estimated but it seems to me that there are more advantages when the government let people practice what they like.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 218, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...fety. There have been numerous incidents that members of rescue services have had...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, really, second, secondly, so, still, thus, whereas, as a result, it is true, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1408.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94035087719 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58117817349 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578947368421 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1037927471 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.307692308 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9230769231 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4615384615 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205010046057 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675164206772 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0519864672105 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124715987887 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344372772272 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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