some people think that people shoukd choose their job based on income in order to provide security for their family.do you think money is an important factor when choosing a job? what other factors should be considered?

Essay topics:

some people think that people shoukd choose their job based on income in order to provide security for their family.do you think money is an important factor when choosing a job? what other factors should be considered?

Although, It is believed by some that while choosing job, the people should consider money as an important factor but, according to my opinion some other factors must also be considered such as the opportunity to grow and improve communication skills.

To begin with, money is one of the primary reason to be considered while getting job due to plethora of reasons. Firstly, everyone want to satisfy the basic needs of their family such as food and clothes without which the survival is difficult. Furthermore, they want to keep up their status and standard in the society by showing high quality smartphones and luxury cars that is however not possible without money. Therefore, the masses focus on the salary before joining the workplace

Moreover, some people want to provide education to their blooming buds which is very expensive nowadays, that is why they consider money as a key factor before the enrolment in any job. To illustrate, most of the civilization of developing countries focus on the vague so that they can settle in their life and save money for the future of their children.

Except from money, the factors namely knowledge and communication skills must also be taken in view while joining in any institution. The working place should be highly reputed where the person got better chance to grow much more and mushroom their wisdom about different activities relating profession. Additionally, the managers should offer positive environment to workers where they can feel safe and secure as well as develop their communication skills by coming in the contact of professional and educated people.

In conclusion, I believe that the employee should focus on the qualities of the joining place so that they can develop themselves as a whole instead of considering only money as the key factor.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 54, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to job'
Suggestion: to job
...is believed by some that while choosing job, the people should consider money as an...
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Line 3, column 487, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the salary before joining the workplace Moreover, some people want to provide ed...
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Line 7, column 38, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Except from money, the factors namely knowledge and communication skills must ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, such as, as well as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1526.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10367892977 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71638623039 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56856187291 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.4093872561 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.6 106.682146367 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.9 20.7667163134 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.0 7.06120827912 198% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321185674717 0.244688304435 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118368012193 0.084324248473 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.088282881855 0.0667982634062 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182949779633 0.151304729494 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10010245177 0.056905535591 176% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 50.2224549098 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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