Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
The question of whether to instill a sense of competition or collaboration into children, as so many parents are struggling with fostering them. There are valid arguments on both sides, which I will elucidate in this essay.
On the one hand, those who support the competition approach promote the idea that it would be a crucial driving force behind young children's progress. They point to evidence from sports that athletics would perform outstandingly if they rivaled their opponents for a champion. Furthermore, proponents of the sense of competition are able to cite an example from the prestigious schools' admission where all students devote themselves in their study, particularly their grades. This may appear to incentive children to overcome the existing stumbling blocks in the future. To the supporters of the idea, these benefits are convincing.
However, opponents point out, either at school or in society, that teamwork or collaboration would enhance significantly children's assistance with each other. In these cases, students work together in small clusters or groups and thus have a feeling of the connection with other members of these groups, leading to the support such as homework or solving problems, to accomplish a common goal. As a result, not only it surges the teamwork skills among student, but also it enables to exercise their communication skills, with much of their learning being involved in face-to-face interaction. Moreover, opponents of co-operation also highlight personal productivity in a team. Examples can be seen that people in a group is assigned in particular tasks which are matched closely his or her strengths, expertise and aptitudes, increasing efficiency of team works. This argument also appears to be quite powerful.
Overall, I would tend to advocate the 'co-operation method'. It seems to be that children from an early age would be vulnerable if fierce competition transpired in their life. It would be more practical to instill the collaboration first for young children, which encourages them to assist each other and gain interpersonal skills.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: Whether; The question whether
The question of whether to instill a sense of competition or co...
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Line 3, column 379, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'schools'' or 'school's'?
Suggestion: schools'; school's
...to cite an example from the prestigious schools admission where all students devote the...
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Line 5, column 550, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to be'.
Suggestion: to be
...ion skills, with much of their learning being involved in face-to-face interaction. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, thus, in particular, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1781.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39696969697 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00912142558 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612121212121 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.916093668 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.3125 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.625 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.9375 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196342939265 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.062624766989 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.048262237931 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124079801677 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0440974213203 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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