Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Educational approach for children is one of the most concerning aspects for every parent all around the world, some people think that children should be encouraged to have competitive sense, while others believe co-operation is more important. I my opinion, both competition and co-operation play crucial roles for children’s development as well as to become a good person.
It is important that the feeling of competition will help children develop their willingness toward achievements. When there is a strong desire to win in a competition, children will build up their skills, their knowledge, as a result, they tend to have big achievement regardless of winning or not. For example, in a marathon, what if there is only one person? Of course, that person will not know how fast or slow his speed is. But with hundreds of athletics, the desire to win will help that person to run faster, even though he might not be the winner.
In the other hand, co-operation is one of the valuable characters, which mostly define someone’s latitude toward their career. If parents’ expectation to their children to become sympathized, helpful and kind adults, then co-operation attitude will help them build up their network and relationship in anywhere they are. This is true because co-operative skill tend to neutralize many other kinds of people styles, as well as many other environment, which means co-operative person will better adapt to new environment. This is the common possibility for a successful person.
In conclusion, it depends on parents’ expectation to their children or children themselves preferences, whether a strong and result-oriented, or a friendly neutral person. It is more helpful to have them balanced and create a perfect combination.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, then, well, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, of course, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1506.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34042553191 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20911602042 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.570921985816 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 455.4 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.5617562061 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.846153846 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6923076923 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.76923076923 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234776276852 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0811431967421 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0820980596592 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157879359453 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107305649307 0.056905535591 189% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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