Task 2: (Both Academic & General training) Some students tend to travel after finishing school and spend time working somewhere instead of going to the university directly. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? (May 2021) Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words
After graduating from school students either tend to pursue education or opt to explore places and gain experience by working. Although each student’s situation and liking is the deciding factor here there are advantages and disadvantages of both the paths taken. This essay ponders upon both the pros as well as cons of both the decisions.
For a student, the school or the university is the turning point of their future. They put immense effort into their coursework. After all these efforts it is obvious that a student may feel the need to take a break and travel before working. This break can prove useful for refreshing the student after tedious years of study, this will also give them time to introspect and maybe decide how they want to shape their career. On the other hand, if the student is not very clear about their goals, they could be wasting precious time of their life travelling around. They may require to brush up their skills all over again. Moreover, their window of deciding to pursue further studies is also lost.
Whereas, a student who immediately pursues studies does so to propel their career and improve the quality of the jobs they get. Once out of the university the person in still in the mindset of a student. This proves to be a boon, as the ability of studying and learning is still intact, unlike the people who decide late in life to take this path after working. Most of the students who do post-graduation end up in higher paying jobs than their peers who didn’t. But a major shortcoming of this decision is that the person enters the professional world quite late than their already working peers. They also have the burden of student loans.
Hence, the decision to travel and work or to study further is very subjective. It all depends on the students calibre and financial situation and I strongly recommend the student takes help of advisors, peers and weigh all the disadvantages and advantages before coming to a conclusion
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 303, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
.... This essay ponders upon both the pros as well as cons of both the decisions. For a stud...
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Line 3, column 583, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'brushing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: brushing
...ife travelling around. They may require to brush up their skills all over again. Moreove...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 128, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Once” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...prove the quality of the jobs they get. Once out of the university the person in sti...
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Line 5, column 101, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
... very subjective. It all depends on the students calibre and financial situation and I s...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 170, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l situation and I strongly recommend the student takes help of advisors, peers an...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, moreover, so, still, well, whereas, after all, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1641.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 342.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79824561404 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49018627147 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549707602339 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.037021808 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.1666666667 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.72222222222 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208798133056 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690276677225 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0439087246538 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13278061558 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0355349463393 0.056905535591 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 50.2224549098 138% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.3001002004 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 303, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
.... This essay ponders upon both the pros as well as cons of both the decisions. For a stud...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 583, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'brushing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: brushing
...ife travelling around. They may require to brush up their skills all over again. Moreove...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 128, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Once” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...prove the quality of the jobs they get. Once out of the university the person in sti...
^^^^
Line 5, column 101, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
... very subjective. It all depends on the students calibre and financial situation and I s...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 170, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l situation and I strongly recommend the student takes help of advisors, peers an...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, moreover, so, still, well, whereas, after all, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1641.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 342.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79824561404 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49018627147 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549707602339 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.037021808 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.1666666667 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.72222222222 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208798133056 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690276677225 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0439087246538 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13278061558 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0355349463393 0.056905535591 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 50.2224549098 138% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.3001002004 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.