15.09.2017 work with mistakes.
Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Many aver that it is parents’ duty to educate their offspring how to be a decent citizen. At the same time, some claim that schools ought to be responsible for forging benevolent members of community. Below both prospect will be discussed in details and author’s opinion will be stated.
On the one hand, parents who by default know their progeny better may effectively pass on them social norms and mores. To illustrate, a mother starts to explain her daughter what is wrong and good at an early age by talking to her, prizing right and punishing vicious conduct. When kids become older parents, who are perceived by dependent children as a paragon and ideal, teach the youngsters via demonstration how to correctly interact in a family and with others. In other words, parents have auspicious circumstances that allow them to form offspring’s understanding of social norms.
On the other hand, there are those who assert that moral upbringing should be trusted to well-prepared educators who were trained at university how to work with young people efficiently. Those professionals may change the society via shaping children’s mores and social standards in a desirable direction. For example, the attitude to LGBT society in western countries such as Germany, Canada, the USA, France and the UK has been changing dramatically within this decade. This alteration has been achieved via novel educational programs that were implemented at elementary and secondary school by the staff. In other words, a school system is a powerful tool of a state that must be used to steer community to a right direction.
In my opinion, forging a decent person requires participation of both family that school. Offspring’s predecessors play a crucial role in creation of foundation of a personality and school elaborate and mount on this basis. Working together they create a decent person who absorbs cultural norms of past generations and the novice trends of tomorrow’s mores at the same time.
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Essay evaluation report
both family that school
both family and school
and school elaborate and mount on this basis
and schools elaborate and mount on this basis
Working together they create a decent person
Working together creates a decent person
By working together they create a decent person
flaws:
1. No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
2. Don't repeat words/phrases, like: 'In other words, ...'
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 324 350
No. of Characters: 1626 1500
No. of Different Words: 197 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.243 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.019 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.823 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 122 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 58 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.426 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.467 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.302 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.534 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.071 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
I know that I have a problem
I know that I have a problem with that who which etc.
What grammatical structures should I use?
thank you.
You don't have issues to use
You don't have issues to use them. You can use them correctly. Your issue is that you may use one of them so often in one essay. like: '...those who...'. When same structure is repeated, people like examiners may figure it out easily. So during essay writing, if words, phrase, sentences structures are used, don't use them again in the same essay.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
may, second, so, well, for example, such as, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1700.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24691358025 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09148350039 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611111111111 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.0869747644 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.333333333 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185311196534 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0583799772421 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0367468702699 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107226562031 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0310991103407 0.056905535591 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.6 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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