Being a celebrity - such as famous film star or sports personality - brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?
In all over the world, famous people, for instance, actors or champions has more benefit than problems in their routine life or their job, I think being popular has a positive significant influence on them.
Mass medias want to attend famous people; therefore, the famous ones become more and more familiar for common people, thus they can earn more wages because for advertising company it is very essential to pay more payment to famous people to can make contract with popular people and moderate famous behavior and they advertise for them because many peoples are following fashion and their behavior; in addition, being famous has positively affect to their job for example film companies or sports teams want to pay more wages to appeal famous people to own cooperation. In that they film or sports team can absorb more visitors and fans. Nowadays, people who have more money they can have more facilities and equipment’s in their own life, they can have luxury homes and cars; moreover, they can travel to worldwide, and marriage to everyone they want.
Being popular is very important to attract more people and attracting more people is very important to has more attention, they can effect on elections and charities, some champions or actors are elected as president or parliament member such as new prime minister in Pakistan, some famous people help charities or help against poverty; moreover, some actors or champions encourage people to rally for peace or against war and they have a positive impact on their future society and especially their history.
Every occupation has some advantage or disadvantage, in my opinion, being popular has more benefits than problems that they can live at a high level and be being lovely for their fans.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 441, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'affected'.
Suggestion: affected
...n addition, being famous has positively affect to their job for example film companies...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 10.4138276553 221% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1481.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07191780822 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52442329762 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506849315068 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 472.5 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 16.0721442886 37% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 48.0 20.2975951904 236% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 181.841887975 49.4020404114 368% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 246.833333333 106.682146367 231% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 48.6666666667 20.7667163134 234% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 17.6666666667 7.06120827912 250% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221646560812 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143127269653 0.084324248473 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0564879573052 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166671478776 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0446362596522 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 26.8 13.0946893788 205% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 22.76 50.2224549098 45% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.0 11.3001002004 195% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.01 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.8 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 26.5 9.78957915832 271% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 21.2 10.1190380762 210% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 27.0 10.7795591182 250% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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