Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead.To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Essay topics:

Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead.

To what extent do you agree with this statement?

During the allocation of budget, it is the government who decides on financial investments. Some people think financing arts is a dead investment. Whereas, few people believe that money should be utilized in public services. In my opinion, public services have become an integral part of the society which requires more funds towards it. However, I do not agree spending on arts is a waste of money.

To begin with, public services are a backbone of the society. Major services provided like police protection, government courts, and registrar office need financing from the government to function. For instance, when there is any natural calamity police provides free services to the public. This is because of the funds granted to them in order to secure the society. Secondly, public services play a vital role in educating youth through organizing campaigns and road shows. Furthermore, they involve them in activities like medical campaigns for rural parts of the country. For example, youth clubs provide sponsorship for education along with creating awareness for literacy.

However, arts also has its own stance in the society. Art is essential for mental peace and entertainment. Firstly, art such as music has been used since ancestral times to heal depression. For example, there are different forms of musical instruments which creates a positive vibe and enhances one's way of thinking. Another reason for investing in arts is to increase tourism in the country. Cultural arts have always been main tourist attraction. For instance, investment in cultural centers have increased foreign investment in the country through tourism.

To sum up, public services are inclined towards more investment for smooth functioning of the society. Nevertheless, art also has its own way to be benefit the public. Therefore, higher investment should be made in public services compared to arts.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, whereas, for example, for instance, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1604.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36454849498 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7703736352 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595317725753 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.062976946 49.4020404114 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 72.9090909091 106.682146367 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.5909090909 20.7667163134 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.13636363636 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226768536353 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0642980943216 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558133967177 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134041529843 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344161957616 0.056905535591 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.82 50.2224549098 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.22 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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