The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In recent years, poor dietary habits and lack of physical exercise has made people prone to several diseases especially obesity. This in turn has put forward several challenges to the health care system of the country. Many believe that this can be effectively tackled if physical education is given more importance in schools, I completely accord with this view and in my below essay I will elaborate my opinion with examples.
Firstly, schools play a key role in the development of a child. The lessons they learn in school, remain with them throughout their lives. Having physical education as a compulsory part of the syllabus, makes children to exercise regularly. Eventually, they start considering it as an essential part of their daily regime. To illustrate, in Japan physical training is a mandatory subject in schools, failing which may result in poor grades. As a result, this reduces the risk of obesity in children and consequently leads to a healthier future.
Secondly, to encourage these children, their parents also end up getting involved in physical exercises. Not only do they get involved with them, but also, they make it an essential part of their day-to-day routine. For example, parents of those children who take up sports as one of their subjects, usually are seen practicing with them, this slowly and steadily increases their interest towards sports. Moreover, because of this the parents also start living a healthier and fitter life, and eventually do not fall prey to obesity.
In conclusion, having sports or physical education as subject in school encourages kids to exercise daily and also gets their parents involved as well. This somehow eliminates the risk of increasing weight
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Suggestion:
...eliminates the risk of increasing weight
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, for example, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1448.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18996415771 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70903730278 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.591397849462 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7248127617 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5333333333 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46666666667 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171273859672 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0572013481186 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0414769698453 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107585325047 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0543909484577 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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